The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Sample Response
The given bar graph represents the different reasons that prompt adultscauses that provoke the adults to continue their education, whereaseducation whereas the pie chart illustrates people's opinionsthe opinion of people on how course costs should be sharedthe proportion of course fee is to be distributed.
The largest group, 40%,A majority of people are interested indeeply indulged in their favourite subjects and want to study them furtherdream to master in them. Thirty-eight percent of respondents38% of them want to gain qualifications Deleteto compete in the society. Twenty-two percent of respondentsOut of 100, 22 people study because it is helpful for their current jobsfind it helpful for their current jobs. An equal number of students enjoy studying and the same 20 while another 20% anxiously wait for their promotions. Individuals who would like to change their jobs account for 12%are just 12% of them and 9% continue studying to meet peopleare those who would like to enhance their friend's circle continue education.
According to the survey, the pie chart’s largest sector, 40%, represents respondents who thinkrepresents the people who think that individuals should pay for their coursesstudy. 35% people state that the employers and the remaining 25% think that taxpayers should pay the cost of the adult study.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's strongest feature is that it includes all seven study reasons and accurately reports the three proposed cost shares. The main limitation is the absence of a clear overview, compounded by describing the 40% interest figure as a majority and offering few meaningful comparisons. Prioritise a concise overview that identifies the leading reasons and the descending cost shares, then revise awkward or incomplete sentences for precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Most figures are included and the pie chart is accurately covered, but there is no overview, the largest bar is mischaracterised as a majority, and comparisons are limited.
State that interest and qualifications lead the reasons, meeting people ranks last, and individuals are expected to bear the largest cost share.
Coherence and Cohesion
Separating the introduction, bar chart, and pie chart gives the report a recognisable progression, though references within the bar-chart paragraph are sometimes unclear.
Organise the reasons into high, middle, and low groups and connect equal figures with one precise comparison.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied vocabulary, but frequent unnatural choices such as causes that provoke, deeply indulged, and anxiously wait make the description imprecise.
Prefer neutral survey language such as respondents study because of interest, qualifications, promotion prospects, or social contact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex forms are attempted, but agreement, article, possessive, and clause-construction errors are frequent and occasionally obscure meaning.
Write complete reporting clauses with explicit verbs, especially when stating who respondents believe should pay each share.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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