The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Sample Response
The figures illustrate the resultsoutcome of a survey about the different reasonsintention that lead adults to choosewhy adults opt to further their education and respondents' views on howtheir opinion on how the fees of each course should be funded.
It is immediately apparent that interest in the subjectthe interest in subject and gaining qualifications are the top reasons for adults' decisionsadults’ decision to continue their education while each individual should fund the majority of their course fees.
In detailBy looking into details, interest in Subject has the highest result in the survey at 40%with 40 percent of the total outcome. It is closely followed by the reason to gain qualifications with a difference of only 2 percentage pointswith only 2 percent difference at 38%. The following reasons which are helpful for the current job, to improve prospects of promotion and enjoy studying are about one-fifth of the total result ranging from 20% to22% while beingto able to change jobs and to meet people are 12% and 9%, respectivelyjust 17 percent combined.
Meanwhile, individuals account for the largest shareindividuals top the result of cost sharing with 40 percent. Employers are just over one thirdjust above thirds of the total result on how fees should be shared while taxpayers should coverwhilst taxpayer should share a quarter of the costs.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and accurately reports most of the principal figures from both charts, including the leading study motives and the proposed cost shares. Its main weakness is imprecise, sometimes ungrammatical wording, while several smaller categories are compressed rather than compared. Prioritise accurate comparative sentences and natural noun phrases so the data are both clearer and easier to follow.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview identifies the two leading reasons and the largest funding share, and most figures are accurate.
Compare the lower study motives separately instead of only combining the two smallest values.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure and progression from overview to details are logical.
Use clearer comparative links between categories and avoid overlong data sentences.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the charts, but several collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Use precise terms such as reasons, respondents, proportions and course costs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of structures is attempted, though article, agreement and infinitive errors recur.
Check plural nouns, articles and complete infinitive forms before submitting.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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