The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.
Sample Response
The table data represents information about the percentage of British households that had consumer durables such as televisions, refrigerators, washing machines, and telephonesconsumer products like TV, refrigerators, washing machines, telephones and so on between 1972 and 1983.
Generally speaking, the most common consumer durableconsumer electronic item in Britain was televisions, whereas the fewestleast households owned dishwashers and video recordersplayers.
As the data suggests, TVs and vacuum cleaners were highly popular in British householdsEnglish families with ownership rates of 93% and 87%, respectivelywith their ownership percentages of 93 and 87 respectively in 1972. A similar ownership pattern for refrigerators and washing machines shows that they were also populardenotes their popularity during the period as well. Ownership of other household appliancesOther household appliance ownership by English families increased during the given period and this rising trend was more significant for telephone and central heatingcentral heating machines. Videos were introduced in 1983, and only 18% of British families had them back then. A similar trend could be observed for the dishwashers – though they appeared in 1978, not more than 5% of British households possessed them in 1983.not more than 5% of British families possessed them in 1983
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview of the most and least widely owned durables and notes several important upward trends. Its main limitation is uneven precision: key start-to-end changes are not quantified, and the discussion of vacuum cleaners overlooks the missing final-year figure. Prioritise exact, evidence-based comparisons, grouping established high-ownership items separately from newer, less common products for clearer progression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear overview of high- and low-ownership items and mentions several important trends. It misses some precise end-point figures and says vacuum cleaners were highly popular without noting the missing 1983 value in the table.
Add exact start-end comparisons for central heating, telephones, refrigerators, and washing machines, and be careful with missing data.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraphing is clear, but the detail paragraph tries to cover all items at once and the final sentence lacks a full stop. The progression would be stronger with grouped comparisons.
Group high-ownership items together, then discuss newer or less common items such as videos and dishwashers.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate, but 'consumer electronic item', 'machines', and 'English families' are not fully accurate for the table.
Use 'consumer durables', 'British households', 'ownership', 'rose', and 'remained widespread'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are some article and sentence-boundary problems, but the message remains clear. Several noun phrases could be more precise.
Check plural nouns and finish every sentence with correct punctuation.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.
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