The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
Sample Response
The supplied graphs compare the number of Japanese tourists who travelled different countries from 1985 to 1995 and it also give data on Australia's portion of the Japanese visitors. According to the first bar graph, the number of Japanese tourists travellingvisited abroad increased each yearhad increased in each year except for 1991. Initially, in 1985, around 5 million tourists from Japan travelled abroad and after a decade this number more than trebled. About 2 million Japanese tourists went to Australia in 1985. From 1985 totill 1988, Australia's share of the Japanese tourist marketthe number of Japanese tourists in Australia increased sharply. Beginning from 2 million tourists in 1985, it reached to around 5 million in 1988. In 1989, the number fell slightly but from 1990 to 1993from 90 to 94, the percentage rosethe number went up. However, in 1994 Australia's share of the marketthe number of people who went to Australia decreased slightlydecreased a bit. The two graphs show the overall rise in the number ofrepresent the steady increase of total Japanese tourists travelling abroad as welltourists travelling different countries as well as Australia's share of the Japanese tourist marketthe number of tourists visiting Australia in particularParticular.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response identifies the main upward trend in Japanese overseas travel and gives a few accurate milestones from the first chart. Its central limitation is a fundamental misreading of the second chart: the values are percentages of Australia's market share, not millions of visitors, and the response is presented as one dense paragraph. Rebuild the report around correct units, separate the two datasets, and make only evidence-based comparisons.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The first chart's overall rise and 1991 dip are recognised, but the entire second chart is incorrectly treated as visitor numbers in millions rather than percentages.
Report Australia's share as rising from about 2% in 1985 to around 6% in 1994, including the dips in 1989 and 1994.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a broadly chronological sequence, but one unbroken paragraph and a contradictory reference to the 1990–1994 movement weaken progression.
Use an overview followed by separate paragraphs for total outbound tourists and Australia's percentage share.
Lexical Resource
There is some appropriate trend vocabulary, but repetition and awkward expressions such as 'travelled different countries' and 'reached to' reduce precision.
Use accurate collocations such as 'travelled abroad', 'rose to', 'market share', and 'percentage of tourists'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some longer structures are attempted, but subject-verb agreement, relative clauses, tense choice, and prepositions are frequently inaccurate.
Prioritise forms such as 'the graphs give', 'tourists who travelled abroad', and simple past verbs for dated changes.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.
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