The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
Sample Response
The bar graph compares visitors to three museums in London from 2007 to 2012. Generally speaking, the National Gallery and the British MuseumNational Gallery and the British museums attracted the most visitorsattracted the largest spectators in 2012 though Victoria and Albert Museum was more popular in the early yearsin early years. As the data suggests, National Gallery received the fewestleast visitors (roughly 6 million) in 2007 and its visitor numbers generally roseits visitors gradually progressed to make it the most visited museum in London in 2012. Approximately 16 million people visited the National Gallerywent to enjoy National Gallery in 2012. Victoria and Albert Museum had the most visitorshad the largest fans in 2007 as it was visitedtoured by almost 13 million people. It was the most popular museum among the three both in 2007 and 2008 but sharply then lost its leading positionlost the battle of visitors’ number. From 2010 to 2012, this museum received the fewest visitorshad been attended by the least number of spectators. Finally, the British Museum was the second most visitedfamous museum in 2007 with its nearly 12 million fans but its visitors' number was lower over the subsequent three yearsdeclined in subsequent three years. In 2011, it was the most attended museum in London in terms of visitor numbersin regards to the visitor's number but it became the second most toured museum next year with roughly 14 million visitorsvisitants.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a relevant overview and traces the changing position of all three museums in a generally logical sequence. Its main weakness is recurrent imprecision in word choice, with visitors described as fans, spectators, or visitants, alongside a few overgeneralised trend statements. The most useful improvement is to use standard chart-reporting language and support each trend with carefully checked values from the intervening years.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and principal changes for all three museums are covered accurately overall, though some intermediate movement is simplified and few middle-year values are supplied.
Add one or two precise comparisons from 2008–2011 and clarify that British Museum attendance fell sharply before recovering rather than declining throughout three years.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report moves logically from the overview through one museum at a time, but the single-paragraph format and some repetitive sequencing limit cohesion.
Use separate paragraphs to group the rising National Gallery trend and the contrasting patterns of the other two museums.
Lexical Resource
There is a reasonable range of trend vocabulary, but frequent unnatural choices such as largest spectators, fans, most toured, and visitants reduce accuracy.
Use consistent academic terms such as visitors, visitor numbers, attracted, rose, fell, and was the most visited museum.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentence forms are attempted successfully and meaning remains clear, although articles, possessives, and tense choices contain recurring errors.
Review article use with museum names and use simple past consistently for completed annual data rather than forms such as had been attended.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.
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