The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
Sample Response
This line graph presents the number of visits to Australia by overseas residentsforeign citizens per year while the table specifies the visits per country that took place in the year 1975 and 2005. There has been a gradual increase from 1975 to 1985 while the number doubled from 19851984 to 1995 Deleteas seen on the chart. However, compared to 1975, in 2005 the number of foreign visitors has increased drastically (from 8.8 million in 1975 to 30.4 million in 2005Total 8.8 in 1975; 30.4 in 2005).
Furthermore, an interesting fact is that among the six countries given, South Korea and Japan had the largest numbers of visitorsmost number of foreign visitors to Australia in 2005 compared to 1975 (South Korea: 2.9 in 1975 and 9.1 in 2005; Japan: 3.2 in 1975 and 12.0 in 2005). Meanwhile, China had 0.3 million visitors to Australia in 1975 and 0.8 million in 2005China having had 0.3 million people visiting Australia in 1975 but 0.8 million in 2005 which is a much smaller increasequite less in terms of changes that took place compared with the other countriesover the years compared to other countries over the past years.
Overall, compared to 1975 the number of foreign visitors has been increasing, reaching just over 30 million visitorsreaching quite a high number of visitors of 32 million to Australia while having a majority of visitors from South Korea and Japan. On the other hand, the fewest visitorsthe least number of travels was from China but it is safe to say that the the largest individual sources were Japan and South Koreamajority of the visits to Australia were from Asian countries than Western countries.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response is well organised and clearly highlights the overall rise in visits, with useful comparisons for Japan and South Korea. Its main weakness is inaccurate and overgeneralised reporting, including the wrong final total, a misstated year, and an unsupported Asian-versus-Western claim. Prioritise checking every date and figure against both visuals, then use the conclusion for one precise comparison rather than repeating the trend.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report gives a clear general trend and includes key table comparisons, especially Japan and South Korea. However, it misstates one year, gives the final total as 32 million rather than about 30.4 to 31 million, and overgeneralises the Asian versus Western comparison.
Use the exact years and figures from the charts, and mention that visits rose from about 9 million in 1975 to just over 30 million in 2005.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically organised into overview, country details, and summary. Some repetition of the overall increase reduces efficiency, but the progression is generally clear.
Avoid repeating the overall trend in the conclusion; use that space for a concise final comparison of the largest and smallest source countries.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate and mostly natural, with phrases such as gradual increase and majority of visitors. Some expressions are awkward or imprecise, including travels and most number.
Use precise terms such as visitors, source countries, largest contributors, total, and increase.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most sentences are understandable, but there are errors with clauses, articles, tense, and sentence fragments. Some long sentences need clearer control.
Check each comparison sentence for a complete subject and verb, especially when using meanwhile and compared to.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
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