The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
Sample Response
The data presented in the table showData presented in the table shows four social and economic indicators in the year 1994 for Canada, Japan, Peru and Zaire, based on UN statisticsbased on the statistics of the UN. As is observed from the given data, Japan and Canada had far stronger socioeconomic outcomesfar better economic conditions than the other two countries. According to the tableAccording to the table data, Japan had the highest per capita income (over US$15,000 annually)(annually over 15 thousand US dollar) while Peru and Zaire had lower per capita incomesfewer per person income (just over 100 USD) in 1994. Canada held the second position in this economic indicator with annual per capita income of over US$11,000over 11 thousand per person annual income. Again, life expectancy in Japan and Canada was far better than the other two countries. While the Japanese population had a life expectancy of 78 yearsa 78 years life expectancy, people of Peru and Zaire had a life expectancy of 50 years at birthat the birth time. Canada and JapanCanadian and Japanese had high daily calorie suppliesplenty of daily calories supply (around 3,000 calories per person per dayaround 3000 calories per day for individual person) while Peru and Zaire hadPeru and Zaire managed to have fewer than 2,000 calories per person per dayless than 2 thousand daily calorie supply per person. For the final economic and social indicator of these four countries, literacy rates in Japan and Canada were much higherliteracy rates in Japan and Canada were far better than the other two countries. Peru managed to have a literacy rate of over 50%over 50% literacy rates while almost two-thirds of Zaire's populationalmost a two-third population of Zaire was illiterate.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear overall comparison and covers all four indicators with mostly accurate figures, making the large gap between the two country groups easy to follow. The main limitation is imprecise aggregation, especially treating Peru and Zaire as sharing the same life expectancy and rounding several values broadly. Prioritise more exact country-by-country comparisons while retaining the concise overview.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response gives a clear overview and covers every indicator with relevant comparisons, although some distinct country values are merged into broad approximations.
Preserve the overview while distinguishing figures such as Peru's 51-year and Zaire's 47-year life expectancy.
Coherence and Cohesion
The description progresses logically by indicator and the central comparison remains clear, despite repetitive transitions and a single dense paragraph.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping closely related indicators without repeatedly using 'Again.'
Lexical Resource
Relevant terms such as 'per capita income' and 'life expectancy' show adequate range, but several collocations and word forms are awkward.
Replace phrases such as 'fewer per person income' with precise forms such as 'lower per-capita income.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex comparisons are attempted and meaning remains clear, but errors in agreement, plurals, articles, and noun phrases occur regularly.
Check countability and noun phrase form in expressions involving dollars, years, nationalities, and proportions.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
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