The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy.
Sample Response
The graphs show the proportionratio of GDP spent on health and education sectors in the UAE from 1985 to 1993 and they also presentit also presents the infant mortality rate and life expectancyinfant mortality and life expectancy rates of this country from 1970 to 1992. According to the bar chart, the UAE administrator spent around 8% on health care and 10% on the education of their total GDP. In 1990After 5 years, the expenditure on health decreased slightly while education spending increased by about four percentage pointsthe expenditure on education increased by 4%. In 1993Finally, in 1993, spending on both sectors rosethe amount spent on both sectors grew and reached 10% of GDP for healthcarereached to 10% of GDP on healthcare and over 14% on education. As depicted in the line graph, the life expectancy in the UAE was 60 years in 1970 while the infant mortality rate was about 70 per 1,000 live birthsinfant mortality rate was 70 per thousand. By 1992After 22 years, both indicators changed favourablyboth of these conditions improved and the life expectancy roseextended to 71 years while the infant mortality rate declined to 20 per thousand. In summary, the UAE's expenditurebudget for health and education sectorssector increased over the period and over the same periodas a result, the infant mortality rate fellreduced and the life expectancy improved.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response accurately identifies the main trends and supports them with well-chosen figures from both visuals, while maintaining clear progression from the bar chart to the line graph. Its main limitation is occasional imprecise or unsupported wording, especially the causal claim linking expenditure directly to health outcomes, alongside several awkward collocations. Prioritise a more precise overview that reports parallel trends without claiming causation and refine grammatical phrasing throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately covers the principal changes and figures in both charts, with only a minor unsupported causal inference.
Describe the simultaneous improvements as separate trends rather than asserting that higher expenditure caused the mortality and life-expectancy changes.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the bar chart to the line graph, although the single-paragraph presentation weakens the report's organisation.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the detailed discussion of each visual while retaining the clear chart-by-chart sequence.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently varied vocabulary describes spending and demographic trends clearly, despite some awkward choices such as 'UAE administrator' and 'life expectancy extended'.
Use more natural collocations, such as 'the UAE government spent' and 'life expectancy rose', to improve precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a range of complex structures with generally good control, though several article, agreement, and preposition errors remain.
Review noun phrases and verb patterns, especially 'spending on education', 'reached 10%', and singular-plural agreement with 'sectors'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graphs below show the Expenditure on Health & Education, UAE as percentages of GDP and Infant mortality and life expectancy.
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