We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Sample Response
We are living in an ultra modern technological agetech-time and the computer is the greatest invention of thethis 21st century. The soaring demandsky touching demand of computer exists in every sector of our liveseach and every sector of our life. Hence dependence on itthe dependency on it is increasing significantly. Nowadays, hardly any sector can be found where a computer is not used and I think it is going to spread further in the near futurespread out more, in near future.
In my viewFrom my point of analysis, computers are going to take the place oftake place of many professionals like doctors, engineers or legal advisors very soon. Perhaps the day is not far offMaybe these days are not so far when we would consult supercomputersconsult with supercomputers regardingin regards to our health issues or any legal advice instead of the relevant professionalsthe professional body. Moreover, I believe, certain specialized uses of computers, such as flying planessome especial utilisation of computer like flying plane would be used routinelyrandomly in our future daily life. For instance, itIt will not be surprising at all if computers are going to be driving our cars in the futureour future car driver or traffic controller.
Without any doubt, the computer is one of the blessings of modern science which makes our life more convenient. However, it is believed that mass utilisation of computer can be harmful to our health and social life. The critics are also skeptical about its benefits due to the negative aspects, circulating through itcircularising throw it like cyber crime or reduced physical activityleast physical movements of the human body. Despite these issues, I suppose computer is a fundamental need of people nowadays. The computer has reduced the workload and saved the precious time which may possibly be used in more productive works or resolving some alarming global problems like finding the cure for the fatal disease, preventing terrorism and war, or settlement for refugees.
In conclusion, I believe computer will be used in every sector of our life in near future and we will become free from such kind of typical responsibilities to do something great for the betterment of our next generation as well as our planet.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear, generally positive position and addresses both future applications and the value of growing computer dependence with relevant examples. Its main limitation is that several ideas remain broad or speculative, while frequent unnatural phrasing weakens precision. The highest priority is to develop one or two predictions more concretely and express them through accurate, natural collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are addressed with a clear position and relevant ideas, although some support remains broad or speculative.
Develop fewer future uses in greater depth by explaining their practical effects and linking each example directly to the position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph structure gives the response a clear overall progression, despite some mechanical linking and loosely connected details.
Strengthen paragraph unity by giving each body paragraph one precise controlling idea and ordering its support logically.
Lexical Resource
The response shows an adequate range and attempts ambitious vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate collocations reduce naturalness and precision.
Prioritize reliable combinations such as widespread computer use, replace professionals, and reduce physical activity over forced expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main meaning, though article, number, preposition, and sentence-control errors recur.
Edit systematically for articles and singular-plural agreement, then simplify long sentences whose clauses are not securely controlled.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
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