It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem?
Sample Response
It is true that life has become more stressful and demandingmiserable and more painful to live in today's competitive world. The trend to lead a normal life has become a nightmare in many parts of the worldin most part of the Globe. The impacts have various reasons and change in lifestyle. DeleteLet's discuss in detail. Firstly, lifestyleFirstly the lifestyle has evolvedhas been evolved to different levels, the rapid growth in technology and to collaborate with the latest trend people's ability to workworkability is challenged. Generally, most of them believe that the lifestyle and the economy have been moved towards high heights. Technology has created new opportunitiesTechnology has been revealed the opportunity and to cater to people’s needsto cater the people's needs to upgrade themselves. Moreover, it has been observed that the economy and lifestyle in urban also drastically varied. For example, all individuals thinkall individual thinks to prevail all opportunities and to enjoy each situation. This makes life competitiveThese makes competitive in all ways. Even in education, the trend has changedtrend is been varied and maintained. In addition to that, there is infinite opportunity being evolved, in most of the developing countries there are many opportunitieslots of opportunity in Research and infrastructure sectors. People believePupil believes that the more they work, the more they will be paidthe more they work they more the will be paid, so they are ready to compromise the health and food for future life. In most of the Asian countries, people not only concentrated in earning more money for their day-to-day life, perhaps they earn to buy properties, which is obviously stressfulwhich obvious being stressful. As a preventive measure, people can plan their work in a systematic way and spend more time with family. Every individual needs to take care of own selves. In most of the western countries, people work five days a weekpeople do work 5 days in a week and left over will not be entertained for official work. They strictly prohibit and spend their time with family, friends & outings etc. These need to be alerted to people living more stressful life. the government can take some initiative and awareness program to familiarise the trends of leading a normal life, perhaps a protocol can be set by introducing the programmesprogram's which can show the advantages and disadvantageson and off's of living a stressful life, this could make some awareness between people and will start taking some initiative steps. In conclusion, the protocol to lead a normal life or stressful is completely dependent on each individual, everyoneevery needs to think whatever is there it is more than enough, do not need to chase material goals constantlyneed to run behind continuously for some things which will impact on life. It is an opportunity for each individual to change their mindset and the self-satisfactory level, which could make them in moving to the right path to lead a normal and meaningful life, which will not trouble own self or environment.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response recognises several plausible causes of stress and offers relevant ideas such as better planning, family time, and public awareness. However, the argument is repetitive and difficult to follow in one long paragraph, while frequent grammar and word-choice errors sometimes obscure meaning. Prioritise a four-paragraph causes-and-solutions structure, developing only two causes and two remedies with clear examples and shorter, more accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response identifies several reasons for stress, such as technology, competition, work pressure, and money, and it suggests planning, family time, and awareness programmes. However, ideas are repetitive, sometimes unclear, and not organised into a convincing answer to the two questions.
Choose two causes and two solutions only, then explain each one with a clear example instead of adding many loosely connected points.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is written as one long paragraph, so the reader has to work hard to follow the argument. Linking words appear, but progression is weak because sentences repeat lifestyle, economy, opportunity, and stress without clear stages.
Use four paragraphs: introduction, causes, solutions, conclusion. Start each body paragraph with a sentence that states the main point.
Lexical Resource
There is some topic vocabulary, such as competitive world, economy, infrastructure sectors, and awareness program. Many word choices are inaccurate or unnatural, including workability, on and off’s, and protocol to lead a normal life.
Use simpler but accurate vocabulary: workload, work-life balance, financial pressure, public awareness, and healthy routine.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent grammar errors affect clarity, especially verb forms, subject-verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. Some sentences are fragments or run-ons, and several meanings are difficult to recover.
Write shorter sentences with one main verb, then check every subject for agreement with the verb.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem?
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