It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem?
Sample Response
The worldword has changed, there has been evolution and transformation in many aspects of modern lifeevery aspect of the universe, gone are the days when people were self-sufficient, now everyone wants more and more and this attitude makes people more stressedstressful.
Day by dayDay and day out people have become competitive, they are longing for better and better than good and in this journey, people are inducing themselves to stressstresses. There were days when people used to be active and enjoy their life by spending time with their families but nowadays people give less time to their families rather they spend their timetimes on the invention of a better lifestyle. For instance, the technology which is prevailing in the present times made a huge impact on a person’s lifestyle. Peoplelifestyle.people are constantlypertinently stressed due to the job burdens to deliver their best and to remain competitivestand in the race.
If an employee aims for a good achievement, his employer aims for a better and atin this juncture, people are imparting their time to get better out of them and this even increases undue stresses. They being stressful take out their stressshow cast their stress on their family members which in turn makes the whole family live a stressful life. In earlier days, when technology was limited people were not under stress, though stressed their stress was limited, if we see the reason behind stress as technology, we can illustrate using an example of mobile phones. Mobile phones convey a person's mobility and liable to respond to the incoming call at any time. But if the mobile phones were not there, there is a limited chance that the person should respond.
And the other reason we see that indicative changes in the family bonds are also causing stresses, people in earlier days were more cordialpeople, in earlier days are more cordial and are less stressed compared to the present time. One can overcome stress in their life when they distance themselves from the competitive world, I do not comprehend that man should not be competitive, he should be competitive but should also be self-sufficient. Secondly, he should not take all the burdens on his head which he cannot solve it, he should havebe a “let it go” attitude that he could overpower the stress.
Thirdly stress can be avoided by training the body and mindculturing the body with meditation, yoga, physical workouts, travelling, recreational activities and apart from these he can spend time with family and hear soothing music too. Finally, a change in one’s attitude is the need of the hour for a person to be stress-free if he is always self-sufficient and does not panic in difficult situationspanic to situations. A person is successful if he is stress-free. This is the ultimate success a person needs right now.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the task and offers several recognisable causes of stress alongside practical coping ideas. Its main limitation is that overlapping claims about competition and technology are repeated rather than developed, while long sentences and imprecise wording reduce clarity. The highest-priority improvement is to select two distinct causes, pair each with one fully explained solution, and express those links in shorter, more direct sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay discusses several reasons for stress and suggests possible solutions, so it addresses the task. However, the causes overlap, some claims are vague, and the solutions are listed rather than developed.
Group the answer around two causes, such as work competition and technology, then give one explained solution for each.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is paragraphing and a general movement from causes to solutions, but progression is uneven. Several paragraphs repeat competition and stress, and the conclusion introduces broad claims instead of summarising the answer.
Use clear cause paragraphs followed by a solution paragraph, with each paragraph beginning with a focused topic sentence.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to discuss stress, work, technology, and lifestyle, but many word choices are inaccurate or unnatural. Examples include evolution and transformation in every aspect of the universe, show cast their stress, and culturing the body.
Replace dramatic or unclear phrases with direct academic vocabulary: modern life, workplace pressure, constant availability, coping strategies, and exercise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent sentence-boundary, article, preposition, and word-form errors reduce clarity. Long sentences often contain comma splices and unclear pronoun references.
Break long sentences into shorter ones and check each sentence has one main idea with a clear subject and verb.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem?
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