The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Sample Response
The provided bar graph and pie chartpie-chart demonstrate the resultsresult of a survey related to adult education. The former chart indicates the reasons why adults decidegrown-ups decide to study while the latter displays how their educationacademic costs should be shareddealt with. Overall, a large number of grown-ups persuade further education due to their interests in subjects while others for a better career prospect. Individuals, employersemployer and taxpayers shouldand tax-payer should share the costsbear the cost of adult education, according to survey participantsparticipants of the survey. In detaildetails, 4 out of 10 adults continue their education due to an interest in a subjecttheir passion for subjects while 38% enrol in further education to gain qualificationsenhance their job qualifications. Two out of ten adultsTwo such adults, out of ten, study to improve their prospects of promotionto be promoted in their jobs while the same proportion of peoplea similar ratio of people study since they enjoy learning. 12% continue further study to change their current jobs while the remaining 9% do it to gain skills to interact with others. Furthermore, 40% people perceive that adult education cost should be paid by individuals followed by 35% employers' and a quarter opines that it should be collected from the tax-payers.
[ Author - Manisha ]
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear overview and accurately covers most of the principal figures, especially the two leading study motivations and the complete cost-sharing breakdown. Its main limitation is incomplete and occasionally imprecise selection: the 22% current-job category is omitted and meeting people is loosely recast. Prioritise a systematic comparison of every significant category, then refine collocations and agreement so the otherwise clear report sounds more precise and controlled.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and mostly accurate figures address both charts well, although the 22% current-job reason is omitted and the 9% category is imprecisely paraphrased.
Cover every significant category and preserve the chart labels' meaning when paraphrasing them.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report progresses logically from chart identification and overview to details, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph weakens structural clarity.
Separate the introduction, overview, and grouped details into purposeful paragraphs while retaining the clear comparative progression.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the task, but awkward choices such as "grown-ups persuade further education" and repeated wording reduce precision and naturalness.
Use more natural academic collocations such as "adults pursue further education" and vary repeated references accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates meaning clearly, though agreement, article, and possessive errors recur in phrases such as "40% people" and "a quarter opines".
Check quantifier structures, subject-verb agreement, and possessive forms systematically during proofreading.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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