The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Sample Response
The table shows the percentage of national consumer expenditureexpenditures on three spending categoriesdifferent items in five separate countriescounties in 2002. It is obvious that in all the surveyed countries, the major spending was on food, drinks and tobacco, more than that spent on clothes and leisure and education- after being added to each other.
The largest proportion of expendituresum of money spent on "Food, Drinks and Tobacco" was in Turkey, at 32.14%Turkey, 32.14% of the national consumer expenditurenational consumption, while the lowest proportion was in Swedenthe least was in Sweden (15.77%). As for the "Clothing and Footwear" category"Clothing and Footwear" category, Italy recorded the highest figurecame first with 9%, followed by Turkey, Spain and Sweden with similar percentagesvery close percentages, about 6%.The least was Sweden again with 5.4%. Turkey again recorded the highest figureAgain, Turkey topped the expenditure; 4.35% of the national consumer expenditurenational consuming was on "Leisure and Education". This"Leisure and Education" This time Spain came last with 1.98%.
Overall, we can see that Turkey's spending on the tow of the three mentioned categories was the highest; however, Sweden had the lowest spending.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response selects several useful extremes and gives a recognizable overview, with the figures for Turkey, Italy, Sweden and Spain mostly matching the table. Its main weakness is incomplete and occasionally overgeneralized comparison: Ireland disappears from the clothing discussion, and the final claim that Sweden had the lowest spending overlooks Spain's lower leisure-and-education figure. Prioritize a fully accurate overview and systematic comparisons across all five countries.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several accurate extremes address the task, but Ireland is omitted from one comparison and the concluding claim about Sweden is not fully accurate.
Compare all five countries within each category and state that Spain, not Sweden, has the lowest leisure-and-education percentage.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves logically from an overview to category-based detail, although the separate final overview repeats earlier information and some punctuation disrupts flow.
Keep one concise overview and use clean sentence boundaries between the clothing and leisure comparisons.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for reporting expenditure and rankings, but errors such as 'counties', 'national consuming' and 'tow' reduce precision.
Proofread key reporting nouns and use precise collocations such as 'consumer expenditure' and 'two of the three categories'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the comparisons, but article, punctuation and noun-form errors recur.
Check articles and sentence punctuation, especially around category names, percentages and transitions between comparisons.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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