The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Sample Response
The supplied graph demonstrates fish and meat intake in a European country from 1979 to 2004over a quarter-century, between 1979 and 2004. In general, fish and several kinds of meat consumption per person per week outlined a decrease, however, chicken intake showed a rise.
Looking at the detailsdetail, fish had the lowest consumptionfish was the least consumed over the periodyear observed and remained the lowest of the four food typeslowest among other meat items. Fish consumption started at about 60 grammesFish started about 60 grammes per person per week in 1979per person in 1979 and decreased slightlyslightly decreased to about 40 grammes per person per weekless than 50 grammes per week in 2004. The same trend was true for lamb and beef consumption which was about 150 grammes and 210 grammes respectively in 1979 and gradually spiked to about 70 grammes and 130 grammes per person per week in 2004 respectively. Although there were some fluctuations and beef was the most widely consumed meatmost favourable meat in 1979, both declined overallthey ended up with a decline in 2004.
On the other hand, chicken intake Deleteobviously showed an increasepointed out an increase. It rose substantiallysignificantly swelled from about 140 grammes in 1979 to about 240 grammes per person per week in 2004per person in 2004. It accounted for about 100 grammes improved during the period observed.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report is clearly organised and identifies the central contrast: chicken consumption rose while fish, lamb, and beef declined. However, some figures are inaccurate and several awkward or contradictory expressions, such as saying beef and lamb "spiked" while describing a fall, reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to verify endpoint values and describe trends with standard, accurate language rather than forcing ambitious but unsuitable vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview captures the main trends and all four series are covered, but the final beef figure is inaccurate and some important comparisons are only briefly expressed.
Check the graph values carefully, noting that beef ends at about 110 grams, and explicitly compare chicken's rise with the sharper declines in beef and lamb.
Coherence and Cohesion
Three focused paragraphs create a clear overall progression, although some references and transitions within the detail paragraphs are mechanical or unclear.
Link related trends through direct comparisons and replace vague references such as "they" with the specific food categories concerned.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonable range of trend vocabulary, but frequent collocational problems such as "outlined a decrease," "gradually spiked," and "100 grammes improved" reduce precision.
Prefer accurate combinations such as "declined gradually," "rose steadily," and "increased by about 100 grams".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex forms are attempted, but recurring errors in agreement, clause linking, articles, and complementation limit grammatical control.
Review sentence boundaries and verb patterns, especially structures such as "started at," "fell to," and "increased by," while keeping subjects and comparisons explicit.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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