The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Sample Response
The lineprovided graph illustrates the consumption of fish and three different kinds of meatmeats in a European country between 1979 and 2004. As a general trend, consumption of fish was lowest between 1979 and 2004 , while over timeand with time people started eating less lamb and beef and ate more chickenpreferred chicken more.
It is shown that the consumption of fish remained relatively stablealmost steady between 1979 and 2004 at around 50 grammeswith an average of 50 grammes per person per week. Fish was consumed less thanwas less consumed compared to lamb, beef and chickenchicken meats. Consumption of beef was the highest among different kinds of meat in 1979 (just over 200 grammes per person per weekabove 200 grammes/ week) but people started eating more chicken over timeover the time and in 2004 chicken was the most consumed meat with about 250 grammes per person per week250 gm per person weekly consumption. People ate almost the same amount of lamb as chicken in 1979the same amount of lamb in 1979 as they ate chicken which was 150 grammes, but unlike chicken, lamb consumptiontheir liking for lamb decreased and the consumption of lamb declined, as beef consumption diddeclined like beef.
Overall,Overall it can be said that in 1979 people ate beef the most and fish the least, and in 2004 chicken became the most eaten meat, fish remained at the bottom with least consumption as always.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response clearly identifies the dominant trends and accurately contrasts the starting and ending positions of all four foods. Its main limitation is that the account relies heavily on endpoints and omits important intermediate fluctuations and crossover points; the highest-priority improvement is to organize the detail around those changes while reducing repetition and correcting several awkward consumption-related expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and endpoint comparisons are accurate, and all four series receive relevant coverage.
Add key intermediate features, particularly beef's fluctuations and the point at which chicken overtook it.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is logically ordered and easy to follow, though the final paragraph largely repeats the opening overview.
Use the final paragraph for an additional comparison or integrate the overview once to avoid repetition.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for describing trends, but several choices, including 'kinds of meats' and 'liking for lamb,' are imprecise or unnatural.
Prefer concise graph language such as 'types of meat,' 'beef consumption,' and 'fell steadily.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex and simple structures are generally well controlled, with occasional article, phrasing, and sentence-boundary errors.
Review articles and clause boundaries, especially 'over time' and the comma-linked clauses in the concluding sentence.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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