The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Sample Response
The maps depict an island before and after some development workrenovation works for tourists and comparecompares the changeschanged on the island resulting from the constructionfor the constructions. Generally speaking, many new facilities have been constructed for tourists, including accommodationaccommodations, a restaurant and a swimming arearestaurant, swimming facilities etc. and these were builtthose have been built without affecting the most of the island's vegetationnatural resources that much. Before the facilities were constructed, there were only trees and a beachthere was only trees and beach on the island and most of its landmost of the places were empty. OnIn this island, many new tourist facilitiestourists’ facilities have been builtmade including accommodation, a restaurant, a reception centre, a pier and a swimming areaincluding accommodation facilities, restaurant, reception centre, pier for boating, swimming facility on the beach and so on. Interestingly plants and trees were not cut down to build these constructions and most of the constructions were made near the beach. Besides, footpaths and roads for commuting have been built to facilitate the tourists. The footpaths were made to walk between the residing places and the beach while the motor tracks were created to visit the restaurant, reception area, and pier for boating. In summary, the construction was mainly made to facilitate the tourists' stay, visit and amusement and for that, no plants or trees were cut.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response identifies the main transformation from an undeveloped island to a tourist resort and mentions nearly all major facilities and transport links. Its strongest feature is broad visual coverage, but repeated generalisations and limited location detail make the comparison less precise, while language errors recur. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the report into clear before-and-after detail groups with accurate spatial relationships.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and broad coverage identify the resort facilities, swimming area and transport routes, although their exact locations and arrangement are not fully developed.
Describe the two accommodation clusters and locate the restaurant, reception, pier and swimming beach relative to one another.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses from the overall change to facilities and access routes, but one long paragraph and repeated summary points weaken the organisation.
Separate the overview from two focused detail paragraphs, grouping buildings in one and paths, vehicle tracks and coastal access in the other.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range for maps and development, but repeated words and awkward phrases such as compares the changed and residing places reduce precision.
Use natural map language such as underwent development, accommodation huts, vehicle track and remained unchanged.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear through a mixture of sentence forms, but errors with agreement, plurals, articles and word forms occur regularly.
Proofread each noun and verb phrase, especially there were, changes, accommodation, a restaurant and the facilities were constructed.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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