The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.
Sample Response
The bar chartsThe graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 and the amount of research funding allocated to research on each diseaseallotted to each of those diseases. Overall,It can be clearly seen that the amount of research funding in many cases did not correlate with the seriousness of the disease in terms of the number of deathsnumbers of deaths. In 1990, about 0.2 million people died from AIDS, 0.1 million from leprosy and 0.3 million from tropical diseases. The death count in this year in Someland was 0.5 million from diarrhoea, 0.4 million from malaria and 1.8 million deaths from TB. These figures contrast withThese figures can be contrasted with the amount of funding allocated to research on each diseasefunding allocated for each disease. In 1990, about 175 million dollars180 million dollars were used for AIDS researchresearching ailments for AIDS, the highest figure shownwhich was the highest amount. This year 80 million was spent for leprosy research, 79 million for tropical diseases, 60 million for diarrhoea. The Someland authoritiesSomelander authority spent 50 million dollars onfor malaria research and allocated 25 million dollars to TB researchallowed TB research 20 million dollars, the lowest research allocationthe lowest amount in researching diseases. In summary, it is clear that funding allocation for disease research in Someland does not closely correspond tois not wholly determined by the number of deaths for which each disease is responsible in 1990in a given year.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear central comparison between research funding and mortality, supports it with figures for every disease, and uses generally effective academic language. Its main weakness is uneven precision in several funding figures, alongside awkward collocations and sentence construction in the final detail section. Prioritise accurate approximations from the scales and express each funding comparison in a clean, complete sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and covers all six diseases across both charts, with only minor imprecision in several approximate funding values.
Read the funding scale more consistently and signal approximate values explicitly where bars do not align exactly with labelled intervals.
Coherence and Cohesion
The comparison develops in a sensible order from deaths to funding, but the single paragraph and repeated overview at the end limit the clarity of the organisation.
Use separate overview and detail paragraphs, grouping the strongest funding-versus-death contrasts rather than listing each disease in sequence.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a useful range of topic vocabulary, although several collocations such as researching ailments for AIDS and allowed TB research sound unnatural.
Prefer standard combinations such as funding for AIDS research, spending on research, and allocating funds to TB research.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response includes varied complex structures and is generally clear, but article omissions, compressed list structures, and awkward verb patterns recur in the funding section.
Write each funding comparison as a complete clause and check articles, subjects, and verb complements during revision.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.
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