The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
Sample Response
The provided line graph delineates data on the changes of visitors' number to Australia from 1975 until 2005 while the table elaborates the numberpercentage of tourists from various countries. OverallAt the onset, the number of overseas visitorsforeign travellers to Australia increased steadilyhad surged ceaselessly during the whole period and tripled by 2005. Moreover, the most substantial growth in the number of visitors came to Australiaforeigners attended Australia washad shown by Japan, South Korea and Europe. The line graph shows that visitsvisit to Australia by non-residents had overwhelmingly moved upward over the 30-year periodover the period of 2 decades: it was nearly 10 million in 1975 and slightly more than 30 million in 2005. Throughout the period, the number of tourists went up as high as 5 million each decade; however, between 1985 and 1995 it boomed to almost 10 million. Turning to the tableWhile taking into consideration the table data we can easily infer that South Korea, Japan and Europe were leading sources in 1975, at 2.9, 3.2 and 1.1 million respectivelyleading sources of tourists (2.9, 3.2 and 1.1 million respectively) to Australia. After three decadesIn the wake of 3 decades, those figures almost quadrupled to 9.1, 12.012. and 4.5 million respectivelyconsecutively. Other countries represented less dramatic increase: China - from 0.3 to 0.8 million, the USA - from 0.4 to 1.1 million and the UK - from 0.9 to 2.9 million. It is worth notingnoticing that the most significant growth in the number of travellers to Australia was from Japan, South Korea and Europe. Australia received the highest number of tourists from these countries during the period.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly conveys the sustained rise in overseas visits and identifies the leading source countries, supported by relevant figures from both visuals. Its main limitation is imprecision: the table is wrongly described as percentages, some growth claims are inaccurate, and several awkward structures reduce clarity. Prioritise an accurate overview of what each visual measures, then organise the graph and table details in separate paragraphs using simpler, natural reporting language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response captures the overall rise in overseas visits and identifies the main source countries, but it mislabels the table as percentages and contains some inaccurate wording about origins and growth.
State clearly that the line graph shows total visits in millions and the table gives visitor numbers by origin country in 1975 and 2005.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report has a logical flow from line graph to table, but paragraphing is weak and some sentences are overpacked.
Use separate paragraphs for the line graph and table, with one concise overview after the introduction.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is reasonably varied, but some collocations are unnatural, such as “foreigners attended Australia” and “in the wake of 3 decades”.
Use simpler, accurate collocations: visits to Australia, visitors from Japan, over the 30-year period.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent article, preposition and noun-form errors reduce accuracy, though meaning is usually recoverable.
Check noun phrases after data labels and use past-tense reporting consistently.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.
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