World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Though some people argue that war and conflicts among nations and within a territory are impersonal regardless of men and women leaders, the history suggests that world saw less violence, war and conflicts under female leaders. Considering this in in mind I suggest the idea that female leadership can be considered for a better world. The major World Wars, conflicts among nations, civil wars mostly caused by the male ego, assassinations and conflicts of interests among men. Very few female leaders contributed to makingcontributed making decisions to go to war withto have war with other nations during their time in powerin their period of ruling a country. People oftenSometimes people often mention the Trojan War and identify a womanconvict a female as the main cause of this warmain reason for this war. However,But the fact is, it is not even a historically verified eventhistorically approved war and its roots lieits root lies more in mythology than in evidence. Even if the story were trueAnd even if it was true, female leaders were not even remotely involved in decidinginvolved deciding to start the war. Though the number of male rulers throughout historythroughout the history is much greater thanis much more compared to the number of female leaders, very few major wars can be attributed tofemale leaders and very few major wars could be related to the decision or action taken by women. Women are naturally mild-hearted and avoid conflicts and wars whenever possibleby all means. They are more caring and less violent by natureby their prototypes and that makes them better leaders in terms of serving people. The leader who is caring and has the mentality to serve people would naturally be a good leader and women are better candidates than men in this regardregards. In summary, the idea of female leadership in terms of avoiding wars and serving nations better is indeed a good idea.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear agreement with female leadership and offers a recognizable line of argument, including an attempt to address historical evidence. Its main limitation is that the case depends heavily on broad gender generalizations and remains insufficiently supported, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken precision. The highest-priority improvement is to organize the response into developed paragraphs built around specific, credible evidence and carefully controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear position and addresses the question, but its main claims are generalized, repetitive, and only partly supported.
Replace assumptions about inherent male and female traits with specific historical evidence and explain how that evidence proves the leadership claim.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a generally recognizable sequence, but presenting the entire response as one paragraph weakens organization and makes links between ideas less clear.
Use an introduction, separate body paragraphs for distinct reasons, and a conclusion so each stage of the argument develops coherently.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss leadership and conflict, but frequent inaccurate choices and collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Use more accurate expressions for historical responsibility and personal characteristics, and avoid phrases such as convict a female and by their prototypes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence structures, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, prepositions, fragments, and clause construction remain noticeable.
Prioritize complete sentence formation and systematically check articles, verb patterns, and subject-verb agreement during revision.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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