Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Education was provided at homecarried at homes for centuries. There were nonot schools. Teachers were hired byfor wealthy people. The poor could not afford teachersafford for teachers so their children did not receivetake any education. Most peopleThe most people were illiterate. Then appeared voices that more education could improving life of all class of society. So schools were established, but education at home was still popular in wealthier householdsat wealthier homes. Both schooling and home educationBoth school and education at home have some advantages and disadvantages. Teaching children at home gives them more opportunitiesopportunity to understand any subject. All attention is paidpaying to one pupil and every question is answered. There is no possibility to cheat or be unprepared for a lessonunprepared to lesson. Students could develop their interesting in any subject very easily. This is the better way to be very wellgood prepared for every exam. But, in general, this is the most expensive way to have well educated child. Children, who are educated alone, have fewerless friends and colleagues, are more selfish and could have difficulties in adult life. School, again in general, is reasonably cheaper than home education. There is less attention for one pupil but among more children is some kind of rivalry. Students learn because they wantbecause want to be better than a friend or colleaguethan friend or colleague. They meet more people so their life is more civilized. Friendship for all life starts very often in school. Adult life has fewerless mysteries for them than for children educated at homehomes. However there are more violence, more opportunity to meet bad company and finally end school without any education. In conclude, school has more advantages because it not only teaches but also socializesbecause not only teach, but also socialize pupils. And for parenting two of the most important subjects are good education and good breeding. It is the best preparationpreparing for adult life.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response covers advantages of both home education and school and ends with a clear preference for schooling, so its central position is understandable throughout. Its main weakness is the high frequency of grammatical and word-choice errors, which makes many sentences awkward even when the meaning can be recovered. The highest priority is to build accurate sentence patterns, especially articles, verb forms, agreement, and noun forms, while developing fewer points more fully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both educational methods and gives a clear opinion, although several advantages are briefly asserted or overgeneralised.
Develop the strongest advantage of each method with a clear explanation or concrete example and reduce the lengthy historical background.
Coherence and Cohesion
The discussion moves recognisably from background to home education, schooling, and a conclusion, but the single-block presentation and choppy sequencing weaken cohesion.
Use clear paragraph breaks and connect neighbouring ideas through logical relationships rather than a succession of short statements.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary to discuss education and social development, but frequent inaccurate word forms and collocations reduce precision.
Practise common education-related collocations and check noun, adjective, and verb forms in phrases such as developing interests and preparing for exams.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some complex structures are attempted, but frequent errors with articles, verb forms, agreement, plurals, and sentence completeness repeatedly affect accuracy.
Prioritise complete subject-verb sentence patterns and systematically edit each sentence for articles, agreement, and correct verb forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.
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