Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
Sample Response
As the human populationAs human population is growing significantlyis significantly rising every year, people's needsrequirements are increasing too. We need more food, more machines, more placesplace to live. As a result of this, peopleAs a result of this people need more land to meet their needssatisfy their requirements. We cultivate and irrigate more and more land to plant vegetables, build new buildings, airports, roads, etc. Sometimes, I thinkI think sometimes we forget that we are not alone on this planet. I disagreehave to disagree with those people who think that human needs are more important than saving land for endangered animals. I base my opinion on the following points. First of all, Deleteas I already mentioned, we are not alone on this planet. A few centuries ago we were part of the natural worldthe part of wild nature. I think we need to remember this fact and respect all creatures around us. SecondSecond of all, I believe that we all need to consider the problemthink of the problem of overpopulation. The human population is dramatically increasing and we must address itwe have to do something about it. InFrom my opinion, every family should have no more than two children. This policy would helpIt will help to curb population growthstop the growth of population, decrease human needs for farmland, housing and industry. In conclusion, I think it is a very topical question nowadays. My point is that everyone should considerall people should answer this question and find athe solution.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response states a clear disagreement and offers two relevant reasons, with the overpopulation point providing a potentially useful practical angle. However, the essay is under length, the ideas remain thinly supported, and the conclusion becomes vague instead of reinforcing the stated position. The highest priority is to develop each reason with specific explanation and examples while sustaining the argument through a direct, decisive conclusion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear opinion is presented and relevant reasons are introduced, but the under-length response develops them only briefly and ends without a firm restatement of the position.
Explain how protecting habitat benefits endangered animals and support both main reasons with specific consequences or examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence from human demand to ethical responsibility and overpopulation is generally easy to follow, though progression is mechanical and paragraphing is absent.
Organise the introduction, each reason, and the conclusion into separate paragraphs with clearer links between claims and support.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate for the topic and includes some effective terms, but several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Use natural phrases such as living space, population growth, and in my opinion, while reducing repetition of needs and requirements.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses both simple and complex structures with generally clear meaning, but article, punctuation, and sentence-pattern errors recur.
Review article use and clause punctuation, and ensure coordinated verbs follow a consistent grammatical pattern.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
Your response
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