When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Technology is an important thing in people’s life and it clearly helps us to adapt towith the period of development. I disagree with thean opinion that, when technology develops in a country, the traditional skills disappear. There are two reasons that I will describe related to this case; which is traditional skills can combine with technology and traditional skills still have a great position in order to technological development. On the one hand, traditional skills are a heritagetraditional skill is the heritage from our ancestorsancestor. So we have a responsibilityhave responsibilities to preserve themtake care for it. Technological development offers huge advantagesThe development of technology is huge advantages for ‘traditional skills’. By using technology,Using the technology we can improve these skills and while trying to introduce new innovations to combine technology and traditional skills. For instance, ‘hand art painting’ is one of the traditional skills, people can make a new creation by using technology touching use ‘Photoshop’. The combination ofbetween hand art painting and Photoshop software will be a great innovation. People can create great works and earn a lot by doing this. On the other handOn another hand, although the technology is advancing rapidlydeveloping sharply, the products made using traditional skillstraditional skill used products still hold a strong position in the marketare still having a high position in the marketing field. For example, the traditional Indonesian productIndonesian traditional stuff namely ‘Songket’ continues to achieve strong salesis still creating great improvement in the sale. In my hometown, an industrial Songket factory, in the end of 2014, received order 2000 to 3000 pieces ‘songket’ stuff from some country including USA, Italy, Japan and Vietnam. This provesIt proofs that traditional products still remain viable todaystand up till now. To sum up, traditional skills are still alive though the technology has advanced dramaticallytechnology is increased dramatically. It still has a special place in people’s life. Also, traditional skills’ popularity will increase if people try to combine both traditional skills and technology.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents a clear disagreement and supports it with two relevant examples, so its central message is consistently understandable. Its main limitation is the frequent inaccurate grammar and awkward word choice, which sometimes obscure otherwise sensible development and make the argument sound imprecise. The highest priority is to build accurate sentence patterns and collocations while explaining each example's connection to the position more explicitly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and supported by two relevant ideas, though parts of the reasoning and examples remain imprecisely explained.
Explain exactly how each example proves that traditional skills can survive technological development and why preservation remains worthwhile.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses through a clear introduction, two main ideas, and a conclusion, but linking is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate.
Use accurate transitions between complete sentences and make the logical relationship between each claim and example more explicit.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient for the topic and includes some less common terms, but frequent collocation and word-form errors reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations with natural phrases such as technological development, traditional products, and received orders from several countries.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, clauses, and sentence boundaries weaken control.
Prioritize complete clause structures and check subject-verb agreement, articles, and singular-plural forms in every sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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