Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information?
Sample Response
Technology has a great impact on our lives. Technological developmentAdvancement in technology makes our lives easier than ever before. The internet,Internet; the most powerful source of information, is an clear example ofextreme example for the advancement in technology. It helps us in many ways and in different fields. This dependence is especially visible in how people search for information.Moreover, our lives are completely dependent on it now.
Advancement in technology has resulted in the invention ofresulted in inventing computers smaller in size and bigger in their storage capacity. Computers now can do a lot of tasks that were not possible 20 years back due to continuous development in their technology. Among these tasks that are relatedAmong these tasks that related to books and writing, computers can store a lot of books in a small file instead of keeping them on shelves. Furthermore, one can reach the needed information easily through a simple computer find functionthrough simple computer's find function rather than keepingkeep searching for a large collection of books for several hours.
I tend to see that it is the age of technology and we should gain its benefits forfour our sake. I believe that the internet has already replaced many printed sourceshas already replaced written books and newspapers as sources of information. Many people prefer to read electronic newspapers rather than buying them as well as they prefer internet search engines like Google and Yahoo! to obtain their information more than any other written source. In addition, many schools now are using laptops, iPads, tablets in their educational regimens. Students are encouraged to send their homework electronically to their teachers to be assessed rather than doing it by the traditional methoddoing by classical method. Besides thatBesides of that, computers' software provides spelling check and grammar-correction optionsgrammatical structures correction options that will aid people to write in different languages in an accurate way.
Finally, in my opinion, countries should try to introduce computers more in their people’s livespeople's life due to its clear benefits for access to informationsignificant positive effects.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear position and supports it with relevant examples involving digital storage, online news, search engines, and education. However, it focuses mainly on technology’s advantages without fully considering whether books or other written sources will retain important roles, and repeated wording, awkward collocations, and regular grammar errors reduce precision. Add a focused paragraph on the limits of replacement, then conclude by directly weighing both sides in concise, carefully checked language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear view that technology has already replaced many written sources and provides relevant reasons about storage, search, news, and education. Development is adequate, but the final recommendation about countries introducing computers is broader than the question and the essay does not fully explore whether books or the written word will ever remain important.
Add one focused paragraph explaining the limits of replacement, such as why legal records, literature, or printed books may still matter, before giving a final position.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing is logical and progression is generally clear, but ideas repeat the phrase advancement in technology and some linking is mechanical or inaccurate. The conclusion is very short and does not summarise the main argument.
Use topic sentences that name one clear reason per paragraph, then finish with a two-sentence conclusion that restates the position and main reasons.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the topic and includes words such as storage capacity, electronic newspapers, and search engines. However, collocation and word-choice errors are frequent, including extreme example for, classical method, and people’s life.
Replace awkward collocations with natural academic phrases, for example source of information, traditional method, and people’s lives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is mostly clear and there is some sentence variety, but article use, prepositions, possessives, and verb forms are regularly inaccurate. Errors are noticeable but usually do not block communication.
Revise each sentence for articles, plural nouns, and verb patterns after phrases such as resulted in, rather than, and prefer to.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you think that modern technology, such as the internet and computers will ever replace the book or the written word as the main source of information?
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