Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
The first computer was invented in 1822 by Charles Babbage, and it was used for basic arithmetic calculation. For some people, the computer has made their life easier. For other humans, computers have made their lifestyle more stressful. The way I see is that the computers are essential in our life and they make easy many kinds of jobs like the jobs of an accountant and an engineer. And it also makes life more colourful. On the other hand, the computer is dangerous for youngsters. Nowadays, computers have a lot of games about war and zombies. Doctors think that games like these can change their mind to have negative impressions and thought. At first, computers make people happy, but on the other side, computers can change teenagers’ mind with the way of games or the internet. Secondly, sitting at a computer too much can be damage human's eyesight. But for this inventors created the glasses against worsening eyesight. Thirdly, it can do people slothful, for instance, if workers play games at working time in order to work hard. However, every minus there is plus. The major advantage is that, with computers you can do reach to points easily. For example, if you work on some projects, you can do lightly videos with computer helps. Next positive side is improving knowledge by a computer, like reading and solving the critical issues. Looking thirdly at a positive side, you can save some documents or pictures which are valuable for you. Taking everything into account, I believe that in near future by computers you can do almost everything. Nevertheless, in today's world, working on computers can do works easier. Despite working easy, it can seriously give harm to your health.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use the general plural Original: calculation Suggested revision: calculations Why it matters: The general reference to mathematical operations should be plural.
- 2. Use consistent plurals Original: the computer has made their life Suggested revision: computers have made their lives Why it matters: The general subject and the possessive referent should both be plural.
- 3. Use natural reference Original: For other humans Suggested revision: For others Why it matters: Others is the natural pronoun contrasting with some people.
- 4. Refer to life directly Original: lifestyle Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: Lives matches the claim about computers affecting everyday life.
- 5. Complete the expression Original: The way I see is that Suggested revision: The way I see it is that Why it matters: The fixed expression requires the object pronoun it.
- 6. Remove the general article Original: the computers are essential Suggested revision: computers are essential Why it matters: A general plural noun does not take the definite article.
- 7. Match the plural possessive Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: Our refers to multiple people, so lives should be plural.
- 8. Fix adjective placement Original: make easy many kinds of jobs Suggested revision: make many kinds of work easier Why it matters: The object must come before the comparative adjective in the make construction.
- 9. Use concise examples Original: like the jobs of an accountant and an engineer Suggested revision: such as accounting and engineering Why it matters: The occupational fields are clearer and avoid repeating jobs.
- 10. Use measured wording Original: the computer is dangerous for youngsters Suggested revision: computers can be harmful to young people Why it matters: The revision avoids an unsupported absolute and uses the correct preposition with harmful.
- 11. Clarify the affected group Original: change their mind Suggested revision: change young people's minds Why it matters: Their has no clear antecedent, and the general noun mind should be plural.
- 12. Use parallel plural nouns Original: negative impressions and thought Suggested revision: negative attitudes and thoughts Why it matters: The coordinated nouns should be plural, and attitudes better expresses the intended mental effect.
Suggested Rewrites
- calculation calculations
- the computer has made their life computers have made their lives
- For other humans For others
- lifestyle lives
- The way I see is that The way I see it is that
- the computers are essential computers are essential
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response offers a recognisable opinion and considers several advantages and disadvantages of computers, including productivity, learning, entertainment, and health. However, ideas are mostly brief or unclear, the single-paragraph structure obscures progression, and frequent language errors sometimes make meaning difficult; the priority is to select two well-explained reasons, organise them into paragraphs, and express them through short, accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A generally positive opinion is present and several relevant effects are mentioned, but development is uneven and some supporting claims are unclear.
Choose one principal benefit and one acknowledged drawback, explain each with a credible example, and restate a consistent final judgement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Basic sequencing markers indicate movement between points, but the entire essay forms one paragraph and the progression becomes list-like and confusing.
Use separate introduction, advantage, disadvantage, and conclusion paragraphs, with one controlling idea in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to identify the topic, but frequent inaccurate choices such as “do people slothful” and “do reach to points” obscure intended meanings.
Rely on common, accurate phrases such as “make people less active,” “complete tasks,” and “harm eyesight” rather than forcing unfamiliar words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in articles, agreement, pronouns, verb patterns, and sentence construction make many clauses awkward and sometimes difficult to understand.
Build short subject–verb–object sentences first, then check plural agreement and infinitive forms before combining ideas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
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