Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
Computers have many advantages. Firstly computers help in effective communication and it makes our communication easier. The internet and e-mail save our time. For example, with the introduction of the internet and e-mail, we do not have to wait days and months to get a reply. Secondly, it increases our interaction with our friends and colleagues. Moreover, we can keep in touch with our old friends even though staying in different poles of the world. For instance, I could talk with my childhood friend using ‘Skype’ yesterday. Furthermore, computers made our everyday life more convenient. We can do e-shopping by sitting at home. Additionally, computers refresh our knowledge. All the information is available on the finger tip. We get all updated news online. Previously we had to wait for the next day to get newspapers. Even e-books and magazines are available online which reduces workload and time. On the other hand, there are significant disadvantages of computers. Overuse of computer causes strain on eyes which leads to poor eyesight. Again one of the reasons for obesity and back pain is overuse of computer. In fact, computers reduce the family relationships. Parents cannot mingle with their children. Even they are not able to arrange leisure time with their family. Probably, modern inventions like internet and e-mail play a vital role in family disruption as family members interact less with each other. Computers have made the human beings lazy as everything is available in seconds. In this era, people’s reading habit is declined remarkably with all these new inventions which in turn cause a loss in world’s literature. In conclusion, though computers are beneficial to the human community, there are several demerits also. So in my opinion, computers have made our life more complex and stressful.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Punctuate the transition Original: Firstly computers Suggested revision: Firstly, computers Why it matters: A comma should follow the introductory sequencing adverb.
- 2. Use precise verb Original: help in effective communication Suggested revision: facilitate effective communication Why it matters: 'Facilitate' directly expresses making communication easier.
- 3. Match plural subject Original: and it makes our communication Suggested revision: and they make our communication Why it matters: The pronoun must agree with the plural subject 'computers'.
- 4. Correct the collocation Original: our Suggested revision: us Why it matters: English uses the indirect-object pattern 'save someone time'.
- 5. Use alternative conjunction Original: and Suggested revision: or Why it matters: 'Or' indicates alternative possible waiting periods.
- 6. Clarify the subject Original: Secondly, it increases Suggested revision: Secondly, computers increase Why it matters: The explicit plural subject removes the unclear pronoun reference.
- 7. Correct concessive structure Original: even though staying Suggested revision: despite living Why it matters: 'Despite' is followed by a gerund and fits the intended contrast.
- 8. Use natural location phrase Original: poles Suggested revision: parts Why it matters: 'Poles' refers specifically to the Earth's extreme points, not distant places generally.
- 9. Use simple past Original: I could talk with my childhood friend using ‘Skype’ yesterday Suggested revision: I spoke with my childhood friend using Skype yesterday Why it matters: A completed event at a stated past time requires the simple past.
- 10. Use present perfect Original: computers made our everyday life Suggested revision: computers have made our everyday lives Why it matters: The continuing effect requires the present perfect, and the plural possessive takes 'lives'.
- 11. Use natural expression Original: do e-shopping Suggested revision: shop online Why it matters: 'Shop online' is the standard phrase for internet purchasing.
- 12. Use precise verb Original: refresh Suggested revision: expand Why it matters: Computers provide access to more knowledge rather than merely refreshing it.
Suggested Rewrites
- Firstly computers Firstly, computers
- help in effective communication facilitate effective communication
- and it makes our communication and they make our communication
- our us
- and or
- Secondly, it increases Secondly, computers increase
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay considers both convenience and stress in substantial detail and ultimately states a clear view that computers have made life more complex. Its main limitation is that the position emerges only at the end, while the discussion relies on many brief, sometimes overgeneralised claims and repetitive linking. Prioritise an early thesis and develop fewer, stronger reasons with precise cause-and-effect explanation.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant advantages and disadvantages are explained with examples, and the final opinion is clear, though it is not established earlier and some claims are insufficiently qualified.
State the negative overall position in the introduction and explain why the strongest disadvantages outweigh the acknowledged benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses from advantages to disadvantages and conclusion, but absent paragraphing and a dense sequence of additive linkers make the organisation mechanical.
Use distinct paragraphs for benefits, drawbacks, and judgment, and rely on topic sentences rather than repeated linking adverbs.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range for technology, health, and relationships, but frequent awkward collocations and overgeneralised wording limit precision.
Use natural expressions such as 'save time,' 'at our fingertips,' 'eye strain,' 'weaken family relationships,' and 'declining reading habits.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex structures communicate the main ideas, though agreement, article, preposition, and passive-form errors occur regularly.
Check singular-plural agreement and active-passive choices in sentences about computer use, health effects, and reading habits.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
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