Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
Some people say that the invention of computers is one of the greatest humankind's inventions. However, other people think that computers make their life more stressful. I agree with those people who think that computers brought many benefits and play a very important role in our modern life. First of all, every company nowadays uses a computer to store its data and make different kinds of operations. It is very difficult to imagine life without computers. A company would have to store millions of papers and documents. Moreover, a customer would have to wait hours to check his balance or get a piece of information about his transactions at his bank, while an employee was looking trough those papers. Another important aspect of this is that people are able to type all their information, make corrections, print or send documents using computers. It makes life much easier. One can spend the rest of the time watching TV with his family or working on something new. We use computers every day sometimes even not knowing it. When we go to a store and use our credit cards many computers process our information and perform transactions. When we need to get some cash we use money access machines that are computerised too. Second of all, computers provided a great means of communication - the Internet. I think it is the easiest and cheapest way to get in touch with relatives, friends, business colleagues, etc. Nowadays the world becomes smaller and smaller. When I was a little girl, I could not imagine that it would be possible to communicate with people from all around the world in so easy way. A person can get the latest news, become friends with someone from another country, find his old friends, ask for a piece of advice, etc. Finally, in addition to these practical benefits people can shop without leaving their house. They just use an Internet access, a computer and their cards to make a payment. It is kind of difficult to imagine that a few years ago people had to spend their time in lines buying tickets. Now, a person can choose a destination, company, date and time and get tickets delivered to his door. I think it is amazing. To sum up, I believe that computers made our lives easier. They change our attitude towards life. I think with the invention of computers people became closer and friendlier.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix possessive order Original: one of the greatest humankind's inventions Suggested revision: one of humankind's greatest inventions Why it matters: The possessive determiner must come before the superlative adjective.
- 2. Use plural lives Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: The plural group 'people' requires plural 'lives'.
- 3. Align verb tenses Original: computers brought many benefits and play Suggested revision: computers have brought many benefits and play Why it matters: Present perfect connects past benefits to the present, while 'play' describes the current role.
- 4. Fix operation collocation Original: make different kinds of operations Suggested revision: perform different operations Why it matters: Computers 'perform operations' rather than 'make' them.
- 5. Add duration preposition Original: wait hours to check Suggested revision: wait for hours to check Why it matters: A stated duration after 'wait' normally requires 'for'.
- 6. Use inclusive pronoun Original: his Suggested revision: their Why it matters: Singular 'they' avoids assuming that every customer is male.
- 7. Match hypothetical tense Original: an employee was looking Suggested revision: an employee looked Why it matters: The simple past fits the hypothetical sequence governed by 'would have to wait'.
- 8. Use data-entry verb Original: type Suggested revision: enter Why it matters: People generally 'enter' information into a computer system.
- 9. Clarify reference Original: It Suggested revision: This Why it matters: 'This' refers more clearly to the preceding set of computer-based actions.
- 10. Fix negative phrase Original: even not knowing it Suggested revision: without even knowing it Why it matters: The standard construction for an unrecognized action is 'without even knowing'.
- 11. Add clause comma Original: credit cards many computers Suggested revision: credit cards, many computers Why it matters: A comma is needed after the introductory dependent clause.
- 12. Use standard machine term Original: money access machines Suggested revision: cash machines Why it matters: 'Cash machine' is the established term for a computerised machine that dispenses money.
Suggested Rewrites
- one of the greatest humankind's inventions one of humankind's greatest inventions
- life lives
- computers brought many benefits and play computers have brought many benefits and play
- make different kinds of operations perform different operations
- wait hours to check wait for hours to check
- his their
Why this response received Band 7.5
The essay presents a firm opinion and develops it through a broad, coherent range of practical benefits, including business efficiency, communication, and online purchasing. Progression is clear and the examples make the argument convincing, although recurring awkward collocations, article errors, and inconsistent tense choices prevent consistently precise expression. The highest priority is a careful language edit that preserves the strong content while making phrasing more natural and grammatically controlled.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response directly answers the question with a clear position and well-developed, relevant examples across several areas of life.
Add a brief qualification acknowledging when computers may cause stress to make the opinion more nuanced without diluting it.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through clearly focused paragraphs, and cohesive devices generally guide the reader effectively despite occasional mechanical sequencing.
Vary transitions and tighten repetitive references to computers so that connections feel less explicitly signposted.
Lexical Resource
A sufficiently broad vocabulary conveys detailed practical examples, though several awkward collocations and imprecise expressions remain noticeable.
Refine phrases such as make operations, money access machines, and use an Internet access into natural academic English.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses a good variety of complex structures, but recurring article, tense, punctuation, and preposition errors reduce consistent accuracy.
Proofread for article use and tense consistency, especially when shifting between present-day examples and hypothetical past situations.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
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