Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
Some people think that computers have made our life easier and comfortable, while others believe that computers have more disadvantages than advantages. This essay will discuss both sides of this issue. The most important advantage of computers is that they make our life easier, how? you may ask! The application of the computer in our daily life is endless. For instance, you can buy whatever you want by clicking on a button (online shopping). Furthermore, currently, people are working at home due to computer technologies. In addition to this, it helps us to communicate our relatives who are staying far away. The communication efficiency is really great while the cost is quite low. Finally, it has made our life more interesting, you can download your preferred music, movie etc. or play video games with your friends online and most importantly whenever you want. Not only in daily life but also at work, computers are playing the big role. People just have to control and the computer will do another job. In big factories, almost all jobs are done by computers and employees just have to check it. Not only factories can be an example of the usefulness of computers, in banks your property is also secured by computers, which makes the life of bankers more convenient. But there are certain disadvantages of computers. Aforesaid computer games are caused computer addiction among children. For instance: a lot of schoolboys aren't gone to school because of computers. They simply can't come off from it; they just can't live without computers anymore. Moreover, not only addiction but also a bad vision is caused by computer. A lot of time people are spent in front of the computer, which really hurts their eyes. Not only illness can be said about the bad side of computers, above-named banks also not secured from so-called "phishing", hackers simply are stealing money from the banks, by just breaking or finding the necessary codes for this. Also in factories, computers are doing a lot of things but only one hitch in one sector and it will stop the whole factory. In conclusion, in my view, computers are very important part of our life, but we should be very careful about using them appropriately.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix number and comparison Original: our life easier and comfortable Suggested revision: our lives easier and more comfortable Why it matters: The general plural noun should be 'lives', and the coordinated comparison needs 'more comfortable'.
- 2. Use plural applications Original: The application of the computer Suggested revision: The applications of computers Why it matters: The statement refers to many uses of computers rather than one application of one machine.
- 3. Remove the unnecessary preposition Original: clicking on a button Suggested revision: clicking a button Why it matters: The transitive verb 'click' can take 'button' directly here.
- 4. Use the work-location phrase Original: at Suggested revision: from Why it matters: 'Work from home' is the standard expression for remote work.
- 5. Use technology as uncountable Original: due to computer technologies Suggested revision: thanks to computer technology Why it matters: 'Technology' is uncountable generally, and 'thanks to' suits the stated benefit.
- 6. Name the plural subject Original: it helps us Suggested revision: computers help us Why it matters: The singular pronoun has no clear antecedent, while the essay discusses computers generally.
- 7. Add the required preposition Original: communicate our relatives Suggested revision: communicate with our relatives Why it matters: The verb 'communicate' takes 'with' before the person contacted.
- 8. Use the general present Original: who are staying far away Suggested revision: who live far away Why it matters: The simple present suits a stable place of residence.
- 9. Use a natural adjective Original: The communication efficiency is really great Suggested revision: Communication is highly efficient Why it matters: The revision avoids the awkward noun phrase and informal intensifier.
- 10. Use parallel plural items Original: music, movie etc. Suggested revision: music, films, and other media Why it matters: The list needs a plural count noun and a formally integrated final category.
- 11. Use the correct article Original: playing the big role Suggested revision: playing a major role Why it matters: The fixed expression is 'play a major role'.
- 12. Clarify the human task Original: People just have to control Suggested revision: People only need to supervise operations Why it matters: The original verb lacks an object and does not explain what workers control.
Suggested Rewrites
- our life easier and comfortable our lives easier and more comfortable
- The application of the computer The applications of computers
- clicking on a button clicking a button
- at from
- due to computer technologies thanks to computer technology
- it helps us computers help us
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s strongest feature is its wide range of relevant examples covering convenience at home and work as well as addiction, health, security, and industrial risks. Its main limitation is that the opinion is only loosely defined and frequent grammatical errors disrupt fluency; the highest-priority improvement is to state a direct judgement early and develop it through clearly paragraphed, accurately constructed sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response examines both positive and negative effects with many relevant examples, but its own judgement remains broad and insufficiently argued.
State clearly whether computers make life easier overall and use each body section to justify that precise position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The advantages and disadvantages follow an understandable sequence, though one continuous paragraph, mechanical linking, and punctuation problems weaken progression.
Separate the introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion into focused paragraphs with controlled transitions.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of technology-related vocabulary, but recurrent inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Replace awkward expressions with natural combinations such as communicate with relatives, play a major role, and suffer from poor eyesight.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Some varied structures are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, tense, articles, passives, and clause construction sometimes make sentences difficult to follow.
Build complete subject–verb clauses first, then check verb forms and agreement systematically before adding complex linking.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
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