Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
Sample Response
With the tremendous advancement in technology nowadays, the computer affects people’s way of life. Though this device has become an inevitable part of our personal and professional life, some people worry that the dependency on computers can only increase complexity in life. Some people strongly support that our life has become easier, more convenient and productive due to the usages of computers, while some people say that computers make life more complex and stressful. I personally believe that computer is very useful in helping people in daily activities and the advantages it offers are far greater than the few disadvantages it has. Regarding the views on both sides, some people have doubtful opinions toward the essential impacts of computers to their life. The statement “what is the computer for? – can simply answer their doubts. Computers can be viewed as one of the humans’ masterpieces which were invented to help us to make things faster and in for mobility. For instance, calculating and processing power of a computer are thousands of times faster and quite accurate than a person. The role a computer plays in our life is unavoidable. They are used everywhere- in hospitals, in labs, in banks, in research centres in the defence department, traffic controlling, manufacturing, quality assurance and so on. It is so much easier and faster to do something with the help of a computer than doing it manually. Thus, in terms of time and manpower consumptions, using computers make people do their job easier and faster. Many risky jobs are now done by computers and this has decreased the casualty in such risky workplaces. Thus computers are to save the human, not to destroy their life. However, advocating the other opinion that computers make life more complex is supposed to be true due to addicted effects from computer usage. Yet, usages of computers depend on the individual, and wise use of this device has almost zero negative effect. Moreover, using a computer does not make life stressful, because of its simplicity and entertaining nature and usages. Music, movies, computer games and websites that we enjoy using a computer are meant to entertain us, not to increase our stress level. In conclusion, it is evident that computers make our life easier and more convenient by helping us in our works, home and journey.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use concise opening phrase Original: With the tremendous advancement in technology nowadays Suggested revision: With rapid technological advances today Why it matters: The original phrase is wordy and combines overlapping time expressions.
- 2. Use plural generalization Original: the computer affects Suggested revision: computers affect Why it matters: A general statement about the technology requires the plural noun.
- 3. Match plural people Original: life Suggested revision: lives Why it matters: The noun should be plural because it refers to people generally.
- 4. Use correct reporting verb Original: support Suggested revision: believe Why it matters: “Support” does not take a that-clause in this meaning.
- 5. Use plural agreement Original: our life has become Suggested revision: our lives have become Why it matters: The general reference to many people requires a plural noun and verb.
- 6. Use uncountable usage noun Original: due to the usages of computers Suggested revision: through the use of computers Why it matters: “Use” is uncountable when referring generally to computer use.
- 7. Use plural noun agreement Original: computer is very useful Suggested revision: computers are very useful Why it matters: The claim concerns computers generally, so both noun and verb must be plural.
- 8. Fix help preposition Original: in Suggested revision: with Why it matters: “Help someone with an activity” is the correct construction.
- 9. Use natural doubt phrase Original: doubtful opinions toward Suggested revision: doubts about Why it matters: The replacement expresses uncertainty with the correct collocation.
- 10. Clarify effect phrase Original: essential impacts of computers to their life Suggested revision: effects of computers on their lives Why it matters: “Effect on” takes the correct preposition and the plural noun matches people.
- 11. Use spaced dash Original: everywhere- in hospitals Suggested revision: everywhere—in hospitals Why it matters: An em dash correctly introduces the illustrative list without a stray hyphen.
- 12. Use correct activity noun Original: controlling Suggested revision: control Why it matters: “Traffic control” is the standard name for this function.
Suggested Rewrites
- With the tremendous advancement in technology nowadays With rapid technological advances today
- the computer affects computers affect
- life lives
- support believe
- our life has become our lives have become
- due to the usages of computers through the use of computers
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay states a consistent opinion and supports it with relevant benefits of computers in work, safety, speed, and entertainment while briefly acknowledging concerns about dependency. Its main limitation is frequent awkward or inaccurate language combined with a single unstructured paragraph; the highest-priority improvement is to organise two focused body paragraphs and express each supporting idea with simpler, grammatically controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear pro-computer position is maintained and several relevant benefits are explained, but the counterargument is dismissed rather than examined and some support remains broad or repetitive.
Develop one specific disadvantage, such as dependency or stress, then explain clearly why controlled computer use still produces greater overall benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable sequence from position to benefits, counterargument, and conclusion, but the absence of paragraphing and repetitive linking weaken progression.
Create an introduction, two distinct body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with each body paragraph centred on one main reason.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a fairly broad technology-related vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations and word-form errors such as "usages," "manpower consumptions," and "addicted effects" reduce precision.
Use reliable phrases such as "computer use," "time and labour costs," "addictive effects," and "workplace injuries."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is attempted, but recurring agreement, article, pronoun, and clause errors sometimes make sentences difficult to process.
Prioritise accurate subject-verb agreement and countable nouns, for example "computers make jobs easier" and "computer use has few negative effects."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?
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