The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Sample Response
The charts illustrate the resultsThe figures illustrate the result of an opinion survey about the reason why adultsadult people choose to study and how tuition costs should be funded. It is clear that based on the survey result, the two main reasons why adults continue studying are interest in the subjectthe two main reasons why adults have continued their study are due to they are interested in subjects and to gain qualificationsto obtain the degree. The cost chart also showsIt is also noticed that the survey also shows that most of the education cost should be funded by individuals themselves.
It can be seen that the two main purposes why adults continue their studieswhy adult continue their study are because they are interested in the subjectbecause they interested with the program and to obtain the qualification, as these two reasons accounted for 40% and 38%these two reasons result reached 40% and 38% respectively. Meanwhile, the percentages of the survey for the reason of being helpful for their current jobreasons of helpful for their current job, improving promotion prospectsimproving prospect and promotion, and that they like studying were in the range between 22% and 20%. As for the figures for thoseAs for figures of those who study for the purpose of changing jobs and to meet new people, they were below 15% each.
As for the survey result of the education cost, it is obvious that 40% of the cost should be paid by individuals themselvesshould become the burden of the respective person themselves. Then 35% should be provided by the employer and 25% should come from taxpayers25% from the taxpayer.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response covers both visuals in a clear structure and accurately identifies the leading reasons for study and the proposed division of costs. Its main limitation is awkward, repetitive language and a broad overview that does not contrast the highest and lowest categories clearly. Prioritise a concise overview naming those extremes and the largest and smallest cost contributors, using more natural survey-reporting phrases throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers both charts, identifies the two main study reasons, and reports the cost-sharing proportions accurately. It could give a stronger overview by contrasting the top and bottom reasons and by noting that individuals are expected to pay the largest share.
Add a concise overview that names the highest and lowest reasons for study and the largest and smallest cost contributors.
Coherence and Cohesion
The report is well divided into introduction, reasons, and cost-sharing details. Some linking is repetitive and there are wordy phrases, but the overall progression is clear.
Use clearer comparative links such as by contrast, meanwhile, and the remaining reasons instead of repeating survey result.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for survey data, but several phrases are unnatural, including adult people, burden, and result reached. Some repetition limits lexical range.
Use adult learners, respondents, proportions, accounted for, and should be paid by.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is generally clear, but errors with clauses, articles, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions occur throughout.
Focus on noun phrases and because-clauses, especially adults continue, they are interested in, and costs should be borne by.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.
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