The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Sample Response
The provided maps revealmap reveals the dramatic changes onin a small island that was developedhad been developed to add a number of facilities, for visiting touristsespecially for the visiting tourists. Before the renovation, this place was surrounded by the sea and had a small beachsurrounded by sea and small beach without any buildings or tourist facilitieswithout any building and tourist facility. The eastern and western parts of the islandEast and west of the island had some treescoconut trees while the rest of it was otherwise openwas only an open space. After the construction and development, the island became much more developedvery dense and useful with its infrastructure and accommodation. Some bungalows were built in the centre of the islandmiddle of the land and some others near the beach in the west. The development also included footpathsThe constructor also facilitated small footpath and tourists can follow thema tourist can easily walk through it to reach the accommodationcottage and the beach. In the southern part, a pier was constructed for landing boats and it ended with the vehicle track, leading directly to the reception and the restaurant. Activities like swimming are now available in the beach area while the open space in the east of the island remained unchanged.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear before-and-after account and covers nearly all major additions, including accommodation, paths, the pier, reception, restaurant, and swimming area. Its main weakness is imprecise or unnatural language, particularly descriptions such as the island becoming 'dense and useful' and a constructor facilitating a path. The highest-priority improvement is to group the changes into a sharper overview and describe locations and transport links with more accurate map vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main transformation and most significant facilities are accurately described, with a relevant overview and only minor imprecision.
Make the overview more specific by contrasting the developed western and central areas with the largely unchanged eastern end.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the original island to its developed state, but the single dense paragraph limits clear grouping.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs covering accommodation and access on one hand and communal facilities on the other.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of map and development vocabulary, though several collocations and labels are awkward or inaccurate.
Replace vague phrases with precise terms such as accommodation huts, footpaths, vehicle track, and tourist facilities.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted successfully, but recurring article, preposition, agreement, and tense errors reduce control.
Edit noun phrases for articles and number, and maintain consistent past tense when describing changes shown on the completed map.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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