The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Sample Response
The mapsmap compares two stages of an island - before and after the development of tourist facilities. As can be seen, only a few trees and a beach were present on the island but many tourist amenities were built afterwards. After the construction, significant changes were madechanges have been done to increase the island's attractivenessthe attraction of island while trees and plants were retainedwere not whacked during the redevelopmentto renovate the island. Many facilities such asfacilities like accommodation unitsaccommodations, a restaurant, a reception centre, a piera pier for boating, footpaths and vehicle tracks were built. Most of the new facilities were built in the central and western parts of the island.Most of the developments were done near the beach area. BesidesBeside, footpaths were made to let people to accesspeople access the accommodation units and the beachthe cottages and beach area while vehicleroad tracks were constructed to connectconstructed to drive through the restaurantrestaurants, reception centre and pier area. In summary, after the construction, the island was equippedgot ready to provide tourists with numerous facilitiesprovide numerous facilities to tourists. Furthermore, trees and plants were present to provide a natural setting for touristsgive pleasure to its tourists and not cutting them was a good idea for a tourist place like this island.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a clear overall account of the island's transformation and identifies most of the new facilities and transport links. Its main limitation is imprecise selection and description of spatial features, alongside some irrelevant opinion and recurring awkward language. The highest priority is to organise accurate comparisons of the two accommodation areas, access routes, swimming beach, and preserved undeveloped land using precise map language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and most major additions are presented, but spatial detail is limited and the claim that most development is near the beach is imprecise.
Compare the two accommodation clusters and their routes more precisely, and mention the swimming area and undeveloped eastern end instead of adding personal opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses from the overall transformation to facilities and access, although the single-block presentation and repeated concluding overview weaken organisation.
Separate the overview from two grouped detail paragraphs, one on facilities and one on access and retained natural features.
Lexical Resource
The response uses relevant map vocabulary, but several choices and collocations such as 'whacked', 'attraction of island', and 'road tracks' are inappropriate or inaccurate.
Use neutral, precise map expressions such as 'remained intact', 'increased the island's appeal', and 'vehicle tracks'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main meaning, but article, agreement, preposition, and passive-form errors recur.
Improve control of articles and passive constructions, especially in phrases describing what was built, preserved, and connected.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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