The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
Sample Response
The supplied table gives data provided by the United Nations on the four social and economic indicators4 major social and economic indicators of four countries in 1994for the year 1994. As the data showAs is observed from the given data, Canada and JapanCanada and Japan were two countries with strong social and economic indicatorsreally rich social and economic indications whereas Peru and Zaire were two countries where life expectancy and the other social and economic indicators were very lowwhere life expectancy and other social and economic factors were very poor in the year 1994. Canada and Japan had both 99% adult literacy rate and their life expectancy was more than 75. Besides, annual incomes per person in these two countries were much higher, more than 11 thousand and 15 thousand respectively. Finally, the daily calorie supply figuresthe daily calorie supplies for people in these two countriesthe people of these 2 countries were more than 3300 and 2800. By contrast, substantially lower figures can be observedTotally opposite scenarios can be observed in Peru and Zaire. The latter two countries had only adult literacy rates of 68% and 34%68% and 34% adult literates and the life expectancy was much lower than in the previous two countrieswas much less than the previous two countries. Finally, the calorie supply per person and life expectancy were significantly lowerwas significantly less in these two countries. These figures indicateThese indicators show low standards of livinga poor living standard in these two countries. In summary, Canada and Japan both had a high standard of livinga rich life standard whereas standards were very low in Peru and Zairewhile it was very poor in Peru and Zaire.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear overall contrast between Canada and Japan and the two less developed countries, supported by several accurate figures for the stronger performers. Its main weakness is incomplete coverage of Peru and Zaire, whose income, calorie and life-expectancy data are mostly left unquantified, while some wording is awkward. Prioritise balanced, precise comparison by selecting key figures from all four indicators and grouping the countries more systematically.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and several accurate figures establish the main contrast, but most numerical detail for Peru and Zaire is omitted.
Include their income, life-expectancy and calorie figures and compare these directly with Canada and Japan.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from the overview to the higher- and lower-performing countries, though the single paragraph and repeated closing comparison weaken organisation.
Separate the overview and detailed comparisons into distinct paragraphs and avoid restating the same contrast at the end.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for comparison, but collocations such as “social and economic indications,” “adult literates,” and “rich life standard” are imprecise.
Use natural reporting phrases such as “social and economic indicators,” “adult literacy rates,” and “standard of living.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses several complex sentences successfully, with only occasional article, agreement and comparative-structure problems.
Improve control of plural nouns and comparative structures, particularly when referring jointly to data from two countries.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
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