The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.
Sample Response
The illustration provides information about the process of collecting current weather informationcollecting current and reliable weather forecasts and then broadcasting it to the publicbroadcasting this to mass people which isare conducted by the Australian Bureau of Meteorology. As can be seen, this process uses several sources of equipmentneeds some equipment to gather weather informationgather news forecasts and three main sources, such as satellite, radar, and the drifting buoy areis used for collecting weather information. To begin with, the satellite is used to capture images of Australian weather from the from spaceoutside of the planet. Meanwhile, radar can give radar screen imagesscreen pictures while a drifting buoy which is placed on the sea reveals a synoptic chart of current weather conditionssynoptic chart of the Australian climate. Subsequently, all of the information is analysed to know the real weather condition in Australia. After that, these data are entered into a computerthese data are put on the computer to prepare the report for the public broadcast. The public receivesPeople will know the weather forecasts in Australia through various media, in particular, TV newsreader, radio, and recorded announcement.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a clear, logically sequenced account of the process, covering all three information sources, the analysis stage, computer preparation, and the three broadcast channels. Its main weakness is imprecise technical wording combined with recurring agreement and clause errors; prioritise the diagram's exact labels and make explicit that satellite, radar, and buoy data all feed into analysis before the broadcast is prepared.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response covers the main stages of the process: data collection by satellite, radar, and buoy, analysis, computer preparation, and broadcast through TV, radio, and recorded announcements. Some details are imprecise, especially describing the sources as gathering forecasts rather than weather data.
Describe the sequence as incoming information, analysis and forecasting, preparing the broadcast, and broadcasting, using the exact outputs shown: satellite photo, radar screen, and synoptic chart.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence is logical and easy to follow, with appropriate stage markers such as to begin with, subsequently, and after that.
Make the stage links more precise by showing that all three data sources feed into analysis before the computer prepares the broadcast.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate but contains several unnatural or inaccurate phrases, including mass people, news forecasts, outside of the planet, and screen pictures.
Use technical but simple terms from the diagram: incoming information, satellite photo, radar screen, synoptic chart, analysis, and broadcast.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There are frequent agreement and clause-structure errors, though meaning is mostly clear.
Check subject-verb agreement with compound sources and revise relative clauses such as which are conducted by.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the-minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecasts.
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