A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
In this century, there are countlessa countless number of people whothat are showing interest in animal rightswhat concerne animals rights, therefore it is becoming a current and contentious topican actual and argued topic.
People are starting to look disapprovingly at all situationslook disapprovingly all situations and events with animal exploitation. Infact, circus for example, has lost its popularity and audiences preferthe audience prefer human performances.
Moreover, animal rights have become part of the law and animalanimal’s abuse is punished with finesfees and occasionally with prison.
Further more, animal breedingalso the animal breeding has been observed and people are realizing that the slaughter of animalsthe killing and the slaughter of animals is carried out cruellyis cruelly done. It is important to realize that younger generationspeople of new generations are developing a new sensitivitysensibility concerning this issue, but a new extremist view is currently emergingcurrently it is emerging a new exstremist thought.
Despite the huge number of vegetarianvegeterian people (most of whom are following a new trendwhich the majority of them are following a new fashion), there are also people with distorted views.
The area that worries me most is animal researchThe area that worry me most regards the animal research which allows considerable and important improvements in the medical research, therefore, in human welfaretherefore in human walfare. Animal rights groups areThe animalist group are spreading wrong information, directly damagingdemaging the research sector. As an illustration, few months ago an animalist group destroyed years and years of neurological research freeing rats used in a laboratory, because they would have been cruelly treated. Unfortunately this animalists did not know that for each treatment was used anesthesia.
Given these points, I defend animal rights and I do not support any form of animal exploitation, nevertheless I do not support any exetremist thought especially concerning medical research.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response shows awareness of the ethical debate and offers a relevant medical-research example, with a final position that attempts to distinguish animal protection from extremism. However, the two views are unevenly developed, the position remains partly contradictory, and frequent language errors strain clarity. The priority is to state a precise opinion early, build one focused paragraph for each view, and edit sentences for basic grammatical accuracy and conventional word choice.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses animal protection and medical research and gives an opinion, but the opposing view and the role of animals for food remain underdeveloped.
Explain each view directly, including food and research uses, then clarify exactly which forms of animal use the final position accepts.
Coherence and Cohesion
A general line of thought is discernible, but excessive short paragraphs, mechanical connectors, and loosely linked claims weaken progression.
Use an introduction, two developed body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with each paragraph organised around one clear central claim.
Lexical Resource
There is some topic-specific range, including terms related to exploitation and medical research, but frequent spelling, formation, and collocation errors reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate use of familiar vocabulary and systematically correct recurring forms such as concerned, extremist, vegetarian, welfare, and damaging.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, prepositions, clause structure, and punctuation sometimes make meaning difficult to follow.
Build shorter complete sentences first, checking each for a clear subject and verb before combining ideas with accurately controlled clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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