An increased number of people today change their career and living places in their lives. Is it a positive or negative development?
Sample Response
Migrating to another city or changing a career is a popular trend nowadaysis nowadays a popular trend. Some people choose to stay in the cities where they were bornstay in the cities where they have been born or to stick to their career and never try anything new in their working livesfor their work, but some decide to change their lives, moving to another city, or changing their work field. Though there can be many disadvantages of radically changing the way of someone's life, in my opinion, such a change can create numerous benefits for all types of people.
Discovering something new was and always will be one of the favourite aspects of people's life. We still try to find out more about the ocean, space, cultures and history, spending large amounts of moneyspending millions of money on these things. While identifying the new limits of space can be a huge step forward for all humanityfor all the humanity, for some people moving to a bigger city can be a personal discovery. To my mind, it is tremendously interesting to discover new places, people, hobbies, and by moving to a new city, these kinds of aspects become possible.
Similarly, changingSimilarly changing the field of work can be a huge step forward into a new world of discoveries for some people. Sometimes, the same dailyeveryday routine that has not changed for yearsdoes not change in years can make someone extremely bored, and make a person fall into depressionfall into a depression. For some individuals, a career change could create a new daily routine, where he or she would have to face new problems, people, tasks, and fresh sources of enjoymentnew enjoyment. It has also been proved by psychologists in a recent study thatin a recent study, that a change in someone's life could be a healthy changetreat.
To conclude, human beings are designed in a way that many aspects of our lives become boring to us after a long timeafter a long, and a change of our living places or career might create a more positive feelingpositive tone in our boring everyday-routines.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response states a clear positive position and develops its discussion in a logical sequence from changing where people live to changing careers. Its main limitation is that possible disadvantages are acknowledged but not meaningfully weighed, while some repeated wording and awkward expressions reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to explain briefly why the benefits outweigh the drawbacks, using more natural phrasing and a less repetitive conclusion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay presents a clear positive view and develops two main reasons, but it only briefly acknowledges possible disadvantages.
Add one sentence explaining why the disadvantages are less important than the benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and progression are clear, with effective movement from place changes to career changes.
Use fewer repeated words such as "new" and make the final conclusion less repetitive.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is flexible enough for the topic, but several collocations are awkward or imprecise.
Use more natural phrases for life changes, career shifts, and psychological benefits.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Most sentences are clear and there is some complex structure, though article use, comma placement, and word forms need attention.
Edit long sentences for punctuation and use fixed expressions accurately.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
An increased number of people today change their career and living places in their lives. Is it a positive or negative development?
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