People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
"Success is always a journey, not a destinationa journey but not a destination". I feel that success is not a place but a part of one's life journeycannot be a place but it is a part and journey of one's own life. The statement arguesThe author of this topic says that people succeed in their lives only because of hard work, not luckbecause of the hard work but not the luck. In my viewAccording to me, both will play vital roles in every individual person's life. In the followingbelow paragraphs I will justify how both are important to succeed. Firstly, I would like to say that without hard work even God will not help you out in overcoming difficulties in lifecoming over the things in life. So, one should work hard to earn anything. I say this because there are many people around the world who achievedtasted success because of their immense hard work. It is a sheer illusion that one comes up in life without hard work. For instance, everyone knows about the president of America. He was born in a poor family in Kansas, his father somehow managed to send him to schoolsend him to the school for education. Then he really worked hard and gained admission to Columbia Universitysecured seats in Columbia University and then to his dedication, he completed his law from Harvard Law University with scholarships and stipends. Luck is also important becauseNow I would like to put emphasis on the luck which is also required for successwhich is also a required one in success. One may be really hard working but if the place where he or she is residing is underdeveloped then it will be very difficult to achieve the feat. Not only that when we read the stories of great people, we can observe that, they had a supportivecoordinating family through which they succeeded, they are not lucky here. One such example is the legendary cricketer Sachin Tendulkar. He is a well-known cricketer in the world. He was such a lucky person that he not only had a very good coach and his parents' support but also got a chance to play international cricket at the age of 16, which I feel is terrific. He used to be busy with the cricket schedule and his wife useduse to take care of their children, so he is lucky enough to have all this. In the end, I would like to conclude by saying that it is a combination of both hard work and luck that makes a man successful in life in all respects. Having one without the otherHaving one without another is like a car without any fuel.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and supports it with substantial discussion of both hard work and fortunate circumstances, so its central message remains easy to follow. Its effectiveness is weakened by overextended examples, weak paragraph separation, and recurring language errors. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the essay into focused paragraphs and explain more directly how each example proves that luck supports, rather than replaces, sustained effort.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear disagreement with the statement and discusses both hard work and luck, though some examples are long and not always tightly connected to the claim.
Make the position sharper by explaining exactly how luck supports hard work rather than replacing it.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas generally progress from hard work to luck and then to a conclusion, but paragraphs are not visually separated and some examples become overextended.
Use clear paragraph breaks and keep each example tied to one controlling idea.
Lexical Resource
There is enough vocabulary for the topic, but some phrases are informal, repetitive, or inaccurate.
Use more precise expressions such as opportunity, background, support network, persistence, and favourable circumstances.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning is usually clear, but frequent article, preposition, agreement, and clause errors reduce control.
Edit long sentences for article use, verb agreement, and punctuation around subordinate clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
People succeed because of their hard work; luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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