The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements?
Sample Response
It is obvious that The information ageInformation age brings speed to our liveslife. Speed and easiness of the internet make it the most popular mediummedia in social affairs. The concept of “social networks”“Social networks” concept has been redefined by the development of the internetinternet development.The internet connection type advocates are of the view that meanwhile, the internet links us together, it has not any side effect; I disagree with it. First of all, the means of online communicationinternet connection methods such as social networks encourage people not to visit each other physically. Their users gradually prefer to use cheap and readily available online communicationcheap and available internet connection to contact their relatives and friendsfind their relevance and friends instead of visiting each other in the real world. This may lead to reducing kindness between people. For example, children may rather send a birthday greetingcongratulation email to their elderly parentshis/her old parents instead of visiting and embracing them. They may even send their birthday gift using gift websites. Moreover, using this mediummedia for connecting to others, may make users addictedmay addict their users. They spend too much timeoverspend plenty of time in social networks, checking emailsemail, chatting, etc.and etc. while they have important personal and professional tasksnecessary personal and professional works. They forget time behind their computers smart devices. Their performance had reduced in work; this may cause giving up their job. They also neglect their personal activities such as personal carecares and doing house chores. To conclude, although it is undeniable that the internet brings many useful services to usenormous useful services for us, I hold the view that using it as media for connecting world people are damaging in the current manner. I hope we can use the internet better and improve the quality of our relationshipsour relations quality.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and supports it with two relevant consequences of online communication, including reduced face-to-face contact and neglect of responsibilities. Its main limitation is that ideas remain somewhat general and the language contains frequent awkward word choices and grammatical errors, while the absence of paragraph breaks weakens organisation. Prioritise accurate sentence construction and natural collocations, and separate each main idea into a clearly developed paragraph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear disagreement and develops two relevant reasons with examples, although some claims remain general or insufficiently explained.
Explain the causal link between internet use and each claimed social consequence more precisely and support it with a fully developed example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses from reduced physical contact to excessive online use, but the single-block presentation and some awkward referencing weaken organisation.
Use distinct introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, with one central idea developed clearly in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the main ideas and shows some range, but frequent unnatural collocations and word-choice errors reduce precision.
Replace expressions such as unnatural noun combinations with standard collocations and check that each selected word carries the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronouns, and sentence construction reduce control.
Prioritise subject-verb agreement and complete clause structures, then proofread each complex sentence for articles, pronouns, and punctuation.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements?
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