It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Talent, as defined by many scientists, is'Talent' as defined by many scientists, is a gift and inherent ability that enables someone to be betterspecial than others in a particular area, while many people believe this, others arguewhile many people believe in that others argue that talent could be learned or gainedcould be achieved, learnt or could be gained with practice. I agree that talent is a gift but could fadecould be strayed without continuous practice.
On one hand, the proof of that talent or being good in a certain fieldin certain aspect is something that comes naturallysomething came spontaneously as many famous talented celebrities, whether they are musicians or professional sportsmenwhether they are a musician or professional sportsmen, never had any teaching or any special teaching when they were young. Moreover, many of them were raised in a poor environment with very limited resources, By contrast, there are many sports teamsin contrast, there are many sports teams which had a huge budget for the best training facilities and they are still losing whereby the team with low budget and even poor training sessions are winning! If talent had nothing to do with our success, then rich students with better facilities would always have performed better than the poor students who study all by themselves. If practice could have done everything, we would definitely have many people like Einstein, Leonardo da Vinci, Newton, Pele and Shakespearemany Einstein, Leonardo da Vinci, Newton, Pele and Shakespeare in every country. The reality is, they are born with talents and their dedication makes them unique.
On the other side talent alone is not enough without practice and hard work. The talented persons need to develop their talentreplenish his/her talent every now and then and try to improve it with practice and learning. Figures such as Leonardo da Vinci and Einstein did not achieveThe personality like Leonardo da Vinci and Einstein have not achieved their success without sacrifice and hard work.
Many famous and talented singers and famous musicians do hours of daily vocal exercisesmake hours of daily certain voice exercise for their vocal cords for maintaining the nice voice quality they have and get the maximum benefit of his talent for his community. Furthermore, the government and community associations should contribute in discovering new talents and promote it, facilitate the training for talented persons and sponsor them from their youngest age and make them stars.
In conclusion, talents always play a key role in our success but self-development, commitments, hard work and tender care are also required to maintain the inherent talent and through practice, we can make impossible into possible.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers a clear opinion and uses several relevant examples to show how natural ability and sustained practice can work together. However, the claim that any child can be trained to become good is not explored as fully, and overloaded sentences with awkward phrasing often strain clarity. Develop a balanced paragraph on what training can achieve for average learners, then express it through shorter, more controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay discusses both innate talent and the need for practice, and gives an opinion. However, the second view in the task, that any child can be taught to become good, is not developed as fully as the innate-talent side.
Give one balanced paragraph explaining how training can raise average children to a high level, even if it may not create world-class talent.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Progression is sometimes weakened by long overloaded sentences and by a late paragraph about government support that is only loosely connected to the task.
Use one paragraph for natural talent, one for training and practice, and one for your final balanced opinion.
Lexical Resource
There is some topic vocabulary about talent, practice, facilities, and dedication. Frequent awkward collocations and word choices reduce precision, such as strayed, replenish his/her talent, and make hours of daily certain voice exercise.
Replace translated-sounding phrases with natural expressions such as innate ability, develop talent, regular vocal exercises, and maintain performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex sentences, but grammar errors are frequent in clauses, articles, agreement, and sentence control. Meaning is usually clear but often strained.
Shorten long sentences and check each clause has a clear subject, verb, and object before adding examples.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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