It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
These days talent hunt showsa talent hunt shows are very popular in India. Some people have quite unique talents which are difficult to imagine. For example, a person can create a shadow of different faces of the freedom fighters of India by just using his two hands. It is a debatable topic whether such talents are learned or it is a gift from birthit is God gifted. Some people are born with talentFew people are born with a talent. For instance, a two-year-old childa two years old child can play several drums at the same timeplay multiple drums parallel like a professional musician. I am confident that a child cannot learn such skills at the age of two. Sometimes you inherit such abilities from your parentsinherit such skills from your ancestors. For instance, it is not surprising if a great singer's son can also sing very well. On the other hand, we have a considerable numberamount of people who are different from their family. For example, a golf world champion comes from a wrestling familybelongs to the wrestler’s family. A champion confirmed that his father wanted him to be different fromthan his family. With rigorous training he became worldwould champion at the age of nine. If talent is acquired only by birth, then the concept of coachingby birth than a coaching concept would not have been accepted so widely. It is said that China won 15 medals in one of the Olympic Games. In response, the government startedAfter that, the government started a training program nationwide where kids are being trained in different sports. In two decades China won 15 medals and became number one in that Olympic game. I truly believe that talent can be learned throughby passion and dedication. We would not have got some of the greatest talents in India like Lata Mangeshkar and Sachin Tendulkar if they stopped trying after their initial failures. If talent is acquired by birth then Mr Amitabh Bachchan would have stopped actingwould have stopped the acting after several unsuccessful filmscontinuous nice flop films in the starting of his career, thinking he does not have any inherent acting skill.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response clearly considers both inherited ability and the value of training, then states a definite view supported by several concrete examples. However, the one-paragraph presentation, abrupt movement between examples, and frequent language errors make the argument less controlled, while some illustrations are not closely tied to sports or music. The main priority is to organise the two views into separate paragraphs and explicitly connect every example to the contrast between innate talent and developed skill.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay discusses both natural talent and training and gives a clear opinion, but some examples are culturally narrow and not always explained in relation to sports or music.
Link each example back to the exact contrast between innate ability and teachable skill.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument moves from born talent to training, but the essay is presented as one paragraph and several transitions are abrupt.
Use separate paragraphs and clearer topic sentences for inherited talent, coaching, and personal opinion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally adequate for the topic, with some good topic words, but there are several wrong word forms and awkward collocations.
Use precise terms such as innate talent, training, coaching, practice, inherited ability, and developed skill.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is a mix of simple and complex structures, but article errors, comparison errors, and verb-form mistakes are frequent.
Check singular/plural noun phrases and conditionals, especially after if and with age expressions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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