When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Nowadays, technological advancesadvancement and their rapid and widespread applicationrapid and wide applications are having a significant impact on a nation's traditional skills and ways of life. Some argue that such an impactsuch impact is so profoundextraordinary that it would make conventional skills and lifestyles obsolete. However, I believe traditional skills and ways of life would continue to thrivethey would continue to thrive by providing alternatives to modern ways of life and innovative ideasways of life, and innovative ideas for modern technologies. First of all, traditional skills and ways of life are becoming a solutionan alternative solution to the problems caused by mainstream ways of life"mainstreamed" ways of life which are greatly influenced by modern technologies. For instance, a cozy restaurant where traditional home-brewed beertraditional, home-brewed beer is served offersis served, offers a different experienceanother experience to people who are bored with branded mass-produced beers with similar flavoursbeers that have the same flavour and come out of mass production with new technologies. It is in such a venue where traditional skills are preserved, people become relaxed and educated. Providing diversity and thus enriching modern ways of life, such traditional skills and ways of life would continue to have their place. Furthermore, conventional skills provide innovative ideas forto the development of modern technologies. For example, inspiredsparkled by how the word "Love" is traditionally knitted into a sweater by some ethnic minority women in some parts of Asia, some managers in the textile industrysome business managers from textile industry have developed some production lines by applying the traditional skills to computer-aided design (CAD)Computer-Aided Designs (CAD). The products have boosted the companies' sales which in turn have increased their investment in preserving traditional skills for further developing their technologies. To conclude, traditional skills and lifestyles are increasingly becoming a useful alternative to the homogeneity brought by the global spread of modern technologiesglobal applications of modern technologies. However, the evolution of technologies is a selection process, whereby some would become obsolete, but there is no doubt that some would thrive when their roles are appreciated.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response presents a clear, nuanced disagreement and develops two distinct, relevant reasons with concrete examples, demonstrating strong control of argument and vocabulary. Its main limitation is presentation: the entire essay forms one paragraph, while several awkward constructions weaken precision. The highest-priority improvement is to divide the argument into purposeful paragraphs and revise sentences whose grammar or collocation obscures otherwise sophisticated ideas.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear and nuanced position is sustained through two well-developed reasons supported by specific examples.
Make the final concession more explicit about why preserving selected traditions remains worthwhile despite some inevitable loss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically and cohesive links are generally effective, but the lack of paragraph breaks significantly weakens organisation.
Separate the introduction, each main reason, and the conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with clear internal focus.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide and often precise, although a few unnatural choices such as ‘mainstreamed’ and ‘sparkled by’ reduce control.
Check less common words and collocations for natural usage before using them to express complex ideas.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is used successfully, with occasional agreement, article, punctuation, and sentence-construction errors.
Revise awkward complex sentences so that clauses are joined accurately and subjects agree consistently with their verbs and pronouns.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Your response
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