The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
Sample Response
The provided table compares four key socioeconomic indicators for four countriesfour important economic and social factors of four countries namely Canada, Japan, Peru and Zaire for the year 1994. As is observed from the given data, Canada and Japan had far better economic and social conditionsa far better economic and social conditions than the other two countries. We can observe from the given information thatinformation that, Japan had the highest literacy rate (99%), annual income per personper person annual income (USD 15760), longest life expectancy (78 years) and second-highest daily calorie supply per person (2,846 calories)second-highest (2846) daily calorie supply per person. CanadaAgain Canada was another country with a very good social and economic situation that had an adult literacy rate of 99%99% literate population, an annual income per person of USD 11,100USD 11100 per person annual earning, a life expectancy of 76 years76 years life expectancy and the highest daily calorie supply per person of 3,326 calorieswhich was 3326. By contrastOn the contrary, the other two countries had poorer economic and social conditions. Peru had only $ 160 annual income per person which is 98 times less than Japan and they had only 68% adult literate compared to the 99% from two other developed countries. Zaire had the worst economic and social condition among these four countries in the year 1994 with the least adult literacy (only 34%), an annual income per person of USD 130130 USD annual per-person income, a daily calorie supply of 1,749 calories1749 daily calorie supply and a life expectancy of only 47 yearsonly 47 years life expectancy. In summary, Japan and Canada were two socially and economically developed countries with very good social and economic indicators while Peru and Zaire were two less-developed countriesundeveloped countries with poor life expectancy, income, calorie supplyearning, food supply and literacy rates.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response accurately establishes the sharp divide between Canada and Japan and the two less prosperous countries, with clear comparisons and extensive use of the table's figures. Its main weakness is uneven coverage, since Peru's life expectancy and calorie supply are omitted, alongside some awkward grammar and phrasing; the priority is to compare every indicator selectively and precisely across both country groups.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview is clear and nearly all reported figures are accurate, but the description leaves out Peru's life expectancy and calorie supply and uses an imprecise 98 times less comparison.
Include Peru's remaining figures and express the income contrast accurately by stating that Japan's income was about 98 times Peru's.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the two stronger countries to the two weaker ones, although the single-paragraph format limits the clarity of the grouping.
Use a separate overview and two detail paragraphs, pairing Canada with Japan and Peru with Zaire for direct comparison.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for describing indicators and contrasts, but repeated wording and collocations such as adult literate and annual earning are occasionally unnatural.
Prefer precise forms such as adult literacy rate, annual income per person, and higher or lower calorie supply.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence structures with generally clear meaning, but agreement, article, punctuation, and pronoun errors recur across several sentences.
Check singular and plural agreement and sentence boundaries, particularly in phrases such as better conditions and in clauses beginning with which or that.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics.
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