A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sample Response
In this century, there are a largecountless number of people that are showing interest in what concernsconcerne animalanimals rights, therefore it is becoming an current and controversial topicactual and argued topic.
People are starting to look disapprovingly at alllook disapprovingly all situations and events with animal exploitation. IndeedInfact, the circus, for example,circus for example, has lost its popularity and the audience prefer human performances.
Moreover, animal rights have become part of the law and animalanimal’s abuse is punished with finesfees and occasionally with imprisonmentprison.
MoreoverFurther more, animal breedingalso the animal breeding has been observed and people are realizing that the killing and the slaughter of animals is carried out cruellycruelly done. It is important to realize that people of new generations are developing a new sensitivitysensibility concerning this issue, but a new extremist view is currently emergingcurrently it is emerging a new exstremist thought.
Despite the huge number of vegetarianvegeterian people (the majority of whom are following a new trend)(which the majority of them are following a new fashion), there are also people with distorted views.
The area that worriesworry me most concerns animal researchregards the animal research which allows considerable and important improvements in the medical research, and therefore in human welfaretherefore in human walfare. The animalist group are spreading wrong information, directly demaging the research sector. As an illustration, few months ago an animalist group destroyed years and years of neurological research freeing rats used in a laboratory, because they would have been cruelly treated. Unfortunately this animalists did not know that for each treatment was used anesthesia.
Given these points, I defend animal rights and I do not support any form of animal exploitation, nevertheless I do not support any exetremist thought especially concerning medical research.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response identifies concerns about cruelty and the value of medical research, giving it a relevant core. However, the two views are unevenly covered, the final position is internally unclear, and frequent lexical and grammatical errors disrupt precision. The highest priority is to state a qualified opinion explicitly, organise one developed paragraph for each view, and edit sentences for basic agreement, articles, and word choice.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses animal protection and medical research, but the opposing views are unevenly developed and the final opinion is contradictory.
State clearly which uses of animals are acceptable, then develop both views with distinct reasons covering the task's main examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main positions can be followed, but numerous short paragraphs and mechanical connectors create fragmented progression.
Combine related points into two developed body paragraphs and use linking expressions only where the logical relationship is clear.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant topic vocabulary is attempted, but frequent spelling, word-form, and collocation errors substantially reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate high-frequency vocabulary and systematically check spelling and word forms before adding less familiar expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex sentences is attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, pronouns, and clause structure persist.
Build shorter complete sentences first, checking subject-verb agreement, articles, and plural forms before combining ideas into complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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