An increased number of people today change their career and living places in their lives. Is it a positive or negative development?
Sample Response
People switch their career pathsswitch career paths and move to different places for various reasons ranging from better prospects, higher earnings, and a better quality of lifebetter prospects, high earnings to the better quality of life. In many instances, this has many positive impacts on a person's family or communityon family or community of a person. Particularly when a talent is not recognised and appreciated in a country or in a career, it is definitely a wise step to change jobs and seek better opportunitiesmove to greener pastures. If we consider the case of a person coming from a developing country, it is very likely that there are fewer opportunities in his home country. If this person relocates to a country where his skill is regarded as niche and rare, chances are that he will get paid 100-300% more than his pay in his native country. For instance, today there are better-paying jobs in the information technology industryInformation Technology industry in the USA than in India. Due to this, the young population in Indiayoung population in India wants to relocate to one of these countries to have better standards of living and salaries. Apart from this, there are more chances to move up the corporate laddergo up in corporate ladder and get chances to interact and work with experts in the industries. In some instances, even when we have the best-paying jobbest paying job, a person may still feel dissatisfiedone may not end their day satisfied. It is strongly advised to divert their energies to a career of their interest or choice. On the contrary, when relocating to a different country or changing jobswhen relocating to a different country or a job, one needs to leave their families and friends behind and live far from them. It takes a very long timeIt takes very long time to socialise in new environments and get used to cultures. For example, if one migratesmigrated from India to Australia, he will have to adjust to different weather conditions, cultures and lifestyleliving style. A lot of things that are deemed acceptable in India are probably considered unacceptableabsolutely insane in Australia. Due to reasons like this, career growth may stagnate for a while and sometimes does not go as expected. We should balance the positives and negatives when deciding to change careers or living places. When we need years to adjust to new careers and communities, it is wise to calculate the impact beforehandcalculate impact beforehand and move on.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers a reasonably developed consideration of both the advantages and drawbacks of changing careers or locations, supported by relevant examples and a useful range of vocabulary. However, its judgement is not clear until the end, and presenting everything as one paragraph makes the progression difficult to follow. State the position in the introduction, then organise the benefits and drawbacks into separate, clearly signposted paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay addresses whether career and location changes are positive or negative and includes both benefits and drawbacks, but the final position is delayed and not stated clearly in the introduction.
State early that the development is mostly positive or balanced, then make each example prove that judgement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas follow a reasonable contrast pattern, but the essay is written as one long paragraph, which weakens organisation and makes examples harder to track.
Divide the essay into introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion with clear topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is fairly varied and often natural, with some good phrases, but there are still inaccurate collocations and occasional informal or exaggerated wording.
Use precise phrases such as career mobility, relocation, professional growth, adjustment period, cultural adaptation, and social isolation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammar is generally understandable with some complex structures, but there are errors in articles, prepositions, pronoun reference, and sentence control.
Edit long sentences for articles and prepositions, especially in phrases about jobs, countries, and standards of living.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
An increased number of people today change their career and living places in their lives. Is it a positive or negative development?
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