We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Sample Response
Ever since our childhood, we have been learning that necessity is the mother of invention. In today's globalised eraNow in this global era, this saying seems particularly relevantit seems to be really true. In the future, technologyIn future technology will have tremendous effects on our societies, the global environment and the economyour societies, global environment and on the economy. In a few decadesAfter few decades the world will be using much more advanced technology than it does at presenttechnology than the present. For the sake of argument, as today’s generation seems to be amazed when they listen that people used to carry a two square inch floppy disk for just 64 MB two decades before. In this essay, I will discuss the impacts of technology on our future.
The advanced technology available today has madeToday whatever advanced technology we have it has made human survivalsurvival of human being easier whereas the reverse is trueand reverse is true if we misuse itif we are misusing it. Solving complex business issues, collecting and creating solid forensic evidence and even using autopilotwhile taking help from autopilot at altitudes of 37,000 feet or moreat the altitude 37000 feet and more, all these useful advancements in technology havehas created a hot debate that how much further technology can advance in the futurein future where technology can go further.
Nowadays scientists are also worried about global warming issues, that shows significant effects of industrialisation to which world is going towards. In future, technology will be so advanced that travel between one corner of the world to another one will be more luxurious and short, leading superpowers of the world will make their defence more strong, alternate energy resources may replace conventional one, use of technology especially information technology will bring world closer and closer.
In the end, I believe that sufficient fundinga sufficient amount of money should be allocated in the budget for technological improvementallotted in the budget as of technology improvement, so that environmental issues can be addressed effectivelyso environmental issues may be addressed substantially and international law enforcing agencies should remain proactive to identify and addressplay their role in perceiving and addressing local and international breaches of labour and environmental lawslaws respectively.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response offers several relevant predictions about future technology and shows some ability to develop a broad discussion. However, it largely fails to answer whether dependence on computers is beneficial or deserves suspicion, and the conclusion shifts toward funding and law enforcement without resolving that question. The highest-priority improvement is to state a clear position on computer dependence and build a focused paragraph that justifies it with specific risks and benefits.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives some future applications, but it only partially addresses the task and lacks a clear position on dependence.
Answer the second question explicitly and develop that position with balanced, relevant reasons rather than unrelated recommendations.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a basic structure, but progression is uneven and several long sentences combine loosely connected ideas.
Give each paragraph one controlling idea and use shorter, clearly linked sentences to develop it.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for the topic and some ambitious wording, but frequent inaccurate collocations reduce clarity and naturalness.
Prefer precise forms such as faster travel, stronger defence, and investment in technology over awkward comparative or prepositional phrases.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex sentences, yet frequent errors in articles, agreement, comparison, and clause structure sometimes strain comprehension.
Control sentence boundaries and basic noun phrases before combining multiple predictions into complex sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
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