World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
History portrays that reign of war and chaos was on the rise under male rulers compared to their counterparts. Now in reality, does this imply that female leaders are more favourable candidates for non-violent governance? In my opinion, it would be irrational to globalise this and crowning of leaders should not on gender biased.
The mighty rulers of the past were predominantly males. The history of conflicts and chaosHistory of conflicts and chaos during their time suggestsdeceive that they possessed an innate quest to conquer the world. Alexander the Great and HitlerThe great king Alexander and Hitler exemplify this. But the matter of fact is a deeper interpretation of historical facts reveals that this was the need and situation of that time. The global scenario at that timeage pushed rulers to wage war and conquerpersuaded the rulers to war and conquer. Another fact would be conflicts were no less commonthe conflicts were not less in eras of female rulefeminine ruler era too; the great ruler of Jhansi in Indian historical accountsfrom Indian scripts would serve an example.
However, the nineteenth century witnessednineteenth century has witnessed more organised and determined leaders like Mahatma Gandhi and Nelson Mandela. They exemplify the unfairness in relating male rulers to violence from a global perspectiveon a global perceptive.
In the present day, where public involvement is emphasised while choosing a leader, the criteria set forward by an educated mass will never be gender biased, instead, they look forward to more sensible leaders. In spite of being under the feminine leadership, India did not make any changesaddress to any changes in its war protocols in the last few yearsin last few years. Similar is the situation in Bangladesh, another Asian countryanother Asian country of Bangladesh. Although history portraysThough our history, canvas male rulers as a source of carnage in the time of antiquity, it would be rather dogmatic to conclude that violence and conflicts are gender-biasedviolence and conflicts are gender bias. Some of the examples mentioned above would serve as evidenceserve the evident. I would opine that for peace to prevail, sensible leaders should be crowned irrespective of their gender differences.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and draws on a varied set of historical and contemporary examples to challenge gender-based leadership claims. Its main weakness is that several examples are asserted imprecisely or only loosely explained, while frequent awkward grammar and word choice reduce authority. The highest priority is to build each paragraph around one accurately explained reason and then edit sentence structures, articles, and collocations for clarity.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is sustained, with relevant reasons and examples, although several supporting points are insufficiently explained or historically imprecise.
Develop fewer examples more fully by showing exactly how each one proves that leadership outcomes depend on context rather than gender.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a generally logical sequence, but the very short third paragraph and some abrupt or mechanical links weaken progression.
Group the evidence into balanced body paragraphs with a clear controlling idea and explicit logical connection in each one.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably broad vocabulary, but recurrent inaccurate collocations and word forms make several claims sound unnatural or unclear.
Prioritise precise combinations such as gender-biased selection and evidence of conflict, and check whether less common words fit their grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is a mix of simple and complex structures, but frequent article, agreement, clause-construction, and punctuation errors reduce control.
Edit each sentence for a complete subject-verb structure, accurate articles and agreement, and clean separation of independent clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
World history suggests that violence and conflict were more evident under male leadership than under female leadership. So, for peace to prevail, female leadership can be considered as a better option than male leadership. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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