Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
Sample Response
Humans and animals have shared a very special relationship since the dawn of time. Humans have used animals for sustenance, for work and also for companionship. In recent timesIn the recent times, there has been a growing concern for endangered speciesconcern for the endangered species, with an increasing numberwith increasing number of birds and animals becoming extinct. I disagree with the viewpoint that habitats for endangered speciesthe habitat for endangered species should be allowed to be used for housing and industryindustries, thus giving more importance to human needs.
FirstTo support my opinion, firstly, humans shouldthe humans should be considerate and humane towards Mother Naturethe Mother Nature and the living beings on earth. Consider the example of parrots, at present, parrots can be seen only in the animated movies or in the zoos. If the right steps had been takenright steps would have been taken at the appropriate time, we could have saved more parrots. By being considerate of animalsconsiderate for the animals we can ensurewe are making sure that the food chain of animals does not get disturbed thereby preserving the cycle of natureand thus does not disturb the cycle of nature.
To give the problem a different perspective, the problem of land for more housing and industries should be solved inwith more constructive ways. Cities can be designed and planned with modern technology to make optimal use of landuse optimum land thus saving the land for the endangered species in need of protectionneedful endangered species. To give an example, Singapore has well-developed infrastructurea well-laid infrastructure that uses the latest technologywhich uses latest technologies to promote biodiversitybio-diversity. The government has created national parks for the endangered species. Thus, both humans and animals thrive in harmony with constructive methods used to build modern cities.
To conclude, although the demand for land is growing every day for more human needs, there are constructive ways by which the supply can be produced, without endangering more animals and risking their extinction. It is also recommended to study and observe the modern city models like Singapore and South Korea to promote constructive ideas instead of destructive methods.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear position, developed through an ethical argument and a practical urban-planning alternative. Its main limitation is imprecision: some factual support is doubtful, and recurring awkward collocations and grammatical errors make otherwise relevant ideas less convincing. The highest-priority improvement is to use credible, accurately explained examples while revising article use, prepositions, conditionals, and word combinations for more natural academic expression.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response maintains a clear disagreement and develops two relevant reasons, though parts of the supporting evidence are questionable or generalised.
Use factually credible examples and explain precisely how each one proves that conservation can coexist with human development.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and overall progression are clear, with each body paragraph serving a distinct purpose, though some linking phrases are formulaic.
Replace mechanical framing such as “To give the problem a different perspective” with more direct logical connections between claims.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for the topic, including some less common vocabulary, but recurring collocational inaccuracies reduce precision.
Learn natural combinations for this topic, such as “protect endangered species,” “use land efficiently,” and “meet housing demand.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex sentences, but frequent errors with articles, prepositions, agreement, and conditional forms remain noticeable.
Review article use and third conditional structure, then proofread each complex sentence for complete and accurately linked clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not?
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