As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
Sample Response
Most people workdo jobs to earn a livingearn money for their livings. There are various reasons for many people to do jobs. For example, some people do jobs to spend their time in something they like to do, some for the salary, some to utilise their skills and to gather more experience and some to gain social status. Some people even prefer to do a job rather than looking after their family business because they do not like the business. This is why job satisfaction becomesbecame different for each personmore versatile to many people who are engaged in different jobs. There are various reasons along with the above-stated factors which are related to job satisfaction. For example, some people are Deleteengaged in such a job, that they do not want but cannotthey don't want to do but they couldn't find any other suitable work. This creates dissatisfaction in their mindsmind. Besides, in many cases, dissatisfaction is caused bydissatisfaction creates due to the surroundings, workplace and ego. As an example, my first jobthe first job of mine was in City Bank head office which was very much neat and clean. Whenever I entered the office, it gave me peace and a motivationpositive inspiration to work. Moreover, the colleagues around me were also very much friendly and helpful. That is why I hardly felt any difference from being at homebarely could make a difference with my home. But, when I joined Prime Bank, I found that the employees did not speak to meemployees are not talking to me in a friendly manner as I expected. Their expressions were somewhat rudesome sort of rude to me. To overcome the issue I tried to make them easy through various efforts like appreciating their work, offering them a treat after work, and engaging themoffering them a treat after office hour, engage them in sports activity etc. Finally, I would like to say that it is not possible for every person to get satisfaction in their jobs. The main reason is that there areThe main reason is there are various types of people who work in the same place and all do not have the same mindset. Some people will be helpful, some will not be. So, it is very much unrealistic for every worker to experience satisfaction in their jobs. Some people may have a good experience, some people may have a bad experience.
[Essay by - Safayet Ullah]
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response addresses both questions and gives a personal workplace example that illustrates how environment and colleagues affect satisfaction. Nevertheless, the first question is handled through a loose list rather than clearly developed factors, and the long single paragraph, repetition, and frequent grammatical errors obscure the argument. Organise separate answers to each question and express the key factors in concise, accurate topic sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts are answered, but relevant factors are listed unevenly and the personal example dominates development.
Develop pay, meaningful work, workplace conditions, and relationships as distinct factors before evaluating universality.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has an overall direction, but it is a single long paragraph with repeated ideas and weak transitions.
Use an introduction, one paragraph on factors, one on realistic expectations, and a short conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Enough vocabulary conveys the ideas, though inaccurate collocations and repeated general words limit precision.
Use established phrases such as earn a living, workplace relationships, and feel at home.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in tense, agreement, articles, and verb patterns reduce control, though meaning is usually recoverable.
Check subject-verb agreement and keep general claims in the present tense.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
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