The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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Sample Response
The two maps show how an island has been developedredesigned. Overall, the island has undergone some noticeable changes, namely the addition of a restaurant, numerous accommodation units, andfew accomodations and various essential amenities.
The island has been transformed into a tourist-friendlytouristically appealing environment. A reception building was addedThe reception was added in the centre of the island, encircled bycenter of the island, which was surrounded by vehicle tracks. Several accommodation units wereFew accomodations were added in a circular layouton a circular way to the west and east of the reception, interconnected by footpaths.on the west and the east side of the island along with a footpath. On the north side, near the reception area, the restaurant was built, which wasis connected to the reception viawith a vehicle track.
On the west side of the island, the smallisland the small area was dedicated to the beach, both prior to and after theboth prior and after developmentredesigning process. The beach was after used for swimming area for tourists visiting the island. ToOn the south, near the seasee coast, a pier was added, which was mainly used for sailing.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response effectively highlights the major physical changes shown in both maps and maintains a clear, logical structure throughout the description. However, accuracy is slightly reduced by imprecise word choices and noticeable grammatical flaws in sentence formation. To enhance overall quality, focus on refining descriptive prepositions and eliminating minor mechanical errors to ensure seamless readability.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report covers all major developments across the island and provides a clear overall summary of the transformation.
Ensure all key spatial relationships, such as how the vehicle track connects the pier to the reception, are described fully.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into distinct paragraphs detailing the central facilities and peripheral features separately.
Use more varied and natural transitional phrases to connect sentences smoothly within paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A good range of map-related vocabulary is used, though there are occasional spelling mistakes and awkward word choices.
Review correct spelling and appropriate collocation use, such as using accommodation as an uncountable noun.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of active and passive voice constructions is attempted, but several minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing persist.
Practice using complex structures accurately, especially prepositional phrases and word order following temporal adverbs.