The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The two maps show an island before and after the construction of tourist facilitieshow an island has been developed . Overall, the island has undergone some noticeable changes, namely the addition of a restaurant, numerous accommodation units, and transport links, including a pier, footpaths, and vehicle tracksvarious essential amenities.
The island has been transformed into a tourist-friendly environment. A reception building was added in the centre of the island, encircled by a vehicle trackvehicle tracks. Several accommodation units were added to the west and in a circular layout to the eastadded in a circular layout to the west and east of the reception, interconnected by footpaths that also lead to the beachinterconnected by footpaths. On the north side, near the reception buildingarea, athe restaurant was built, which was connected to the reception via a vehicle track.
On the west side of the island, a small area was occupied by a beachdedicated to the beach, both prior to and after the development process. The beach was after used for swimming purposes by the tourists visiting the island. To the south, near the coastsea coast, a pier was added, which was mainly used for sailing.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear and accurate summary of the main changes shown in the maps, structured in a logical sequence. The writing demonstrates good vocabulary and accurate complex grammar appropriate for describing spatial developments. To improve further, ensure all key spatial details—such as the eastern part of the island remaining largely undeveloped—are highlighted and refine minor word-order phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main changes and key features are highlighted clearly with an overview of the transformation.
Mention unchanged areas, such as the untouched trees on the far east side of the island, for complete coverage.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into paragraphs with clear transitions between visual features.
Vary cohesive devices slightly more to connect structural comparisons across paragraphs even more smoothly.
Lexical Resource
A good range of location and map-related vocabulary is used accurately throughout the description.
Incorporate more precise vocabulary for spatial relationships, such as specifying access points or transportation connections.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of passive and complex structures are used with good overall grammatical control.
Correct minor word-order errors, such as changing 'was after used' to 'was later used' or 'was subsequently used'.