The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The two maps show changes to an island before and after the introduction of tourist infrastructurehow an island has been developed . Overall, the island has undergone some noticeable changes, namely the addition of a restaurant, numerous accommodation units, and a pier, and access tracksvarious essential amenities.
The island has been transformed into a tourist-friendly environment. A reception building was added in the centre of the island, encircled by a vehicle trackencircled by vehicle tracks. Several accommodation units were addedwere Few added in a circular layout to the west and east of the reception, interconnected by footpaths, which also extend westward to the beachinterconnected by footpaths. On the north side, near the reception area, athe restaurant was built, with a vehicle track branching north from the reception loop to reach itwhich was connected to the reception via a vehicle track.
On the western tipwest side of the island, a small area was dedicatedthe small was dedicated to the beach, both both before and afterprior to and after the development process. The beach was later designated as a swimming areawas after used for swimming area for tourists visiting the island. To the south, near the southern shoresea coast, a pier was added, which was mainly used as a docking facility for yachts and boatsused for sailing.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response provides a clear summary of the island's transformation with a well-defined overview and effective grouping of key features. However, noticeable grammatical slips and incomplete phrase structures occasionally disrupt the natural flow of the report. To enhance the overall quality, proofread carefully to eliminate typographical errors and refine word order in complex sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key features of the before-and-after maps are accurately identified and supported by a clear overall overview.
Include minor remaining visual details, such as the preservation of palm trees, to make the comparison fully comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is arranged logically into distinct paragraphs, maintaining a broad sequence of ideas across the description.
Use smoother transitions between positional details to avoid abrupt sentence structures.
Lexical Resource
An adequate vocabulary range is used for spatial describing, though localized awkward word choices occasionally appear.
Refine precise prepositional phrases and noun collocations when describing map positions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of sentence forms is attempted, but frequent mechanical and structural errors interrupt sentence accuracy.
Proofread for stray capitalized words and incorrect verb-adverb word order to ensure error-free structures.